Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

taire shikwe gilay maiN sunooNga magar
yun hi mujse milo muskuraate hue

sahi hai :thmbup:

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

Asslamoalikum!

Meri agle attachment bhi hazir hai.

woh sitam bhi Dhaaye aur chaahe bhi keh
'yun hi mujhse milo muskuraate hue'



oops sis misra bebehr ho gaya hai :) recheck .....:thmbup:

[naveed iqbal]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

hmm misra zara sa behr mein nahi hai...dubara koshish kijiye :)


pyaar ka koi geet gungunaate hue


misre mein t ka wazan gayab hai....

changa bhela te hay way

[Gul]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

waise to sirf girah lagani thi magar mashallah se aapne to saath chand ashaar bhi pesh kar diye..lagta hai ye behr aapke liye khaasi aasaan rahi :thmbup: chaliye dekhte hain kaun kaun se misre bilkul behr mein hain :)


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wah...ikdam sahi!:thmbup:



waise to aapne behr mein likhne ki koshish ki hai magar aapka pehla misra bebehr ho gaya hai aur woh bhi bas ek choti si ghalati se... asl mein yaad rakhein ke hamesha lafz 'na' ka wazan har haal mein sirf '1' hota hai...2 kabhi nahi...OK ...shuru mein mujhse bhi yahi mistake hoti thi magar phir asaatiza logon ne tok tok ke durust kara diya...:D




ye bhi theek hai! :)




ye bhi sahi hai :)[/center]

Thnaks for corrections :)
Sachi baat hai K ghazal apnaa SHoa`ar nahi go K
Khoobsoorat Sinf hai :)

Khush rahiyay ....! :jazak:

[shakeeel]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

wah shakeel sahab pichle muqaable ki tarah is baar bhi aap ki entry qaabil-e-taareef hai... bahut hi rawaaN dawaaN girah hai...mashallah...mabrook :thmbup:

Thanks Shummu jee

Mein amuman kisi bhi competition mein hissa leney sa gurez hi karta hun, baaz wajoohaat ki bina par, magar aap ka yeh silsila itna dilchasp laga k shamil ho hi gaya.......aur un wajoohaat mein ek wajah PG par voting ka tareeqa kaar bhi hai, jis se mein mutafiq nahin hun.
baharhaal aap se guzarish hai k "sirf ek hi vote" rakhiye.
mere khayaal mein 50% voting se aur 50% experts ki raye se faisla hona chahiye.

Khush rahiye hamesha

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Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

31st

try karo..bahut hi aasaan hai...aur girah bhi achchi hai... me waiting..do try :thmbup:

mushkil hai buhat behar main likhna ..kafi practice ki zarorat hai 372-scare

acha ab deekho
bhool kar tum sab zamnay ki talkhiyan
'yun he mujh se milo muskraate huwe'

[iraj]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

welldon acha silsila hai.

[Eshaa Chaudhry]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

welldon acha silsila hai.

On board dear

aap bhi join kijiey ..
try kijieey kuch sh'r to ban hee jaey ga :thmbup:

[Shahdil]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

wah aap ka dono sher achcha hai aur pehli girah bilkul behr mein hai magar mujhe zaati taur pe doosra sher ka khayal zyaada pasand aaya hai magar doosri girah be behr ho gayi hai aur woh bhi lafz HIJR ki wajah se...sahi talaffuz hai HIJ-R(2-1) naakeh HI-JAR(1-2) ok... chaliye phir is doosre misre ko durust karke phir se girha lagaiye :thmbup: (homework :khi:)

Boht Mushkil Kaam Hai...Theory Se Hamesha Mujhay Chirr Rahi Hai..Lekin Lagta Hai Ab Aap Kee "Shayri Seekhiye" Wali Theory Parrhani hee Parray Gee...
Waisay Meinay Koshish Kee Hai, Bataein K Ab Bhee Be Behr Hai Ya Theek Hai..

Hijr Kee Teergi Ko Mitatay huwe
'yun hi mujhse milo muskuraate huwe'

Aik Aur Koshish Bhee Mulahiza Farmaei'n...
Baei'n Kaa Isteaara Meine Dil K Liye Use Kia Hai

Dard Ko Apni Baei'n Chhupatay Huwe'
'yun hi mujhse milo muskuraate huwe'

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[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

changa bhela te hay way

2 1 2,2 1 2, 2 1 2, 2 1 2
pyar ka koi geet gungunatr hoe
yuhi mujh semilo muskurate hoe


ise yun bhi likha jaa sakta hai:

koi naGmaa muhabbat ka gaate hue
'yun hi mujhse milo muskuraate hue'

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

Thnaks for corrections :)
Sachi baat hai K ghazal apnaa SHoa`ar nahi go K
Khoobsoorat Sinf hai :)

Khush rahiyay ....! :jazak:

U welcome sisteddy

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

Thanks Shummu jee

Mein amuman kisi bhi competition mein hissa leney sa gurez hi karta hun, baaz wajoohaat ki bina par, magar aap ka yeh silsila itna dilchasp laga k shamil ho hi gaya.......aur un wajoohaat mein ek wajah PG par voting ka tareeqa kaar bhi hai, jis se mein mutafiq nahin hun.
baharhaal aap se guzarish hai k "sirf ek hi vote" rakhiye.
mere khayaal mein 50% voting se aur 50% experts ki raye se faisla hona chahiye.

Khush rahiye hamesha

shukriya jee ab se shortlist hone ke baad hi polling hogi aur single voting hogi inshallah :rose

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

mushkil hai buhat behar main likhna ..kafi practice ki zarorat hai 372-scare

acha ab deekho
bhool kar tum sab zamnay ki talkhiyan
'yun he mujh se milo muskraate huwe'

oho phir chook gayi....ye dekho...

'sab zamaaney ki' ko palat ke ' zamaaney ki sab' kar do to misra behr mein aa jaayega aur ikdma rawaaN ho jaayega:thmbup:

bhool kar tum zamaaney ki sab talkhiyaaN
'YuN hi mujhse milo muskuraate hue'

kyon ab laga na rawaaN? :)

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

welldon acha silsila hai.

shukriya :salam: aap bhi partcipate kijiyega next muqaable mein :D:

[shummu]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye(2)-15 rozah SILSILA

Boht Mushkil Kaam Hai...Theory Se Hamesha Mujhay Chirr Rahi Hai..Lekin Lagta Hai Ab Aap Kee "Shayri Seekhiye" Wali Theory Parrhani hee Parray Gee...
Waisay Meinay Koshish Kee Hai, Bataein K Ab Bhee Be Behr Hai Ya Theek Hai..

Hijr Kee Teergi Ko Mitatay huwe
'yun hi mujhse milo muskuraate huwe'

Aik Aur Koshish Bhee Mulahiza Farmaei'n...
Baei'n Kaa Isteaara Meine Dil K Liye Use Kia Hai

Dard Ko Apni Baei'n Chhupatay Huwe'
'yun hi mujhse milo muskuraate huwe'

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wah lagta hai behr mein likhna aapka baayein haath ka khel hai... bahut khoob...well done :clap:

jee main out of station thi plus viral ka shikaar.... ab theek hun magar kamzori jaate jaate jaayegi inshallah...:)