Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye-naya HAFTAWAR SILSILA

[shummu]

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NOTE:NEXT TIME SE MAIN IS SILSILE KO 1 HAFTE KE BAJAAYE 2 HAFTA KA KARUNGI ...taakeh zyaada se zyaada log apni soch ke ghoRe Daura sakein aur is mein hissa le sakein..shukriya!!!! :salam:

[shakeeel]

Re: Aaiye GIRAH lagaiye-naya HAFTAWAR SILSILA

wah wah wahhhhhhhhhh kya kehne shakeel sahab ..bahut hi rawaaN dawaaN behtareen giraah hai...mazaa aa gaya.....:thmbup:

ummeed haia ayenda bhi participate karte rahenge :D:

Thanks, aap ne to itni taareef kar di , poetry ka shok to hai lekin kabhi poetry likhi nahin, bass wesey hi kabhi kabhi tuk bandi kar leta hun.
Thanks again

[sham-e-mehfil]

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Tu khak hai pastiyun ki wo asman tehra
Kaha kiss nay tha ehd-e-wafa karo iss se

[shummu]

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Tu khak hai pastiyun ki wo asman tehra
Kaha kiss nay tha ehd-e-wafa karo iss se

aapne bhi hissa liya dekh kar khushi hui...sher achcha hai magar be behr hai...

aapke misre ko behr mein karne ki koshish karti hun:


woh aasmaaN to bas ik khaak hai zameeN kii tuu
'kaha tha kisne ke ehd-e-wafaa karo un se?!'

:thmbup:

[shummu]

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AAJ LAST DAY HAI...JALDI JALDI APNI ENTRIES DE DIJIYE TRAAKEH POLLING SHURU HO...phir inshallah next misre ke satah haazir hoti hun :)

[Gul]

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:)

Buhat khooB ..
DukhoN ki aag mein jaltay raho sadaaa ab tum.....
Kaha tha kis nay k ehd-e wafa karo Onn se ....!

Buhat khooB :) ..MashaAllah !

[Gul]

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Wa Alaikum Assalam
bht achha silsila shuru kiya hay shammu dear ..:rose

per kya hay k humein to likhna nahin aata so kessay participate kar saktay hain

Aap itni achi achi sharings kart hai ..
Try b kar sakti hein Eshaa....!
Just try ....Koi b perfect tu hai nahi na...!

[Z.]

[kashish]

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Asslam-o-Alikum!
Phecle misre ko psand krne ka shukriya
Ab me ne aik or misra likha hai.
Ye durost hai ya nhi zror btaye ga.
http://www.pegham.com/attachment.php...1&d=1216038476

[Ainy Guriya]

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[MUTFANIN]

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Salam,
Agar ap kuch munfarid na karein tu ap ka nam Shummu Ji se badal kar kuch aur rakh deya jaey ga.:D:
Buhut umda silsila he.Mujhe Shakeel sahib ka Shair buhut passand aya.Meri totiphoti girah kuch yun he ke

Sadaein dete ho ab keyon tamam dunya ko
'kaha tha kisne ke ahd-e-vafaa karo unse'

[shummu]

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nice khayal!!!magar wazan mein nahi hai....

ise behr mein laate hain:

1 2 1 2, 1 1 2 2 ,1 2 1 2 ,1 1 2 (2 2)
kyoN phir-te reh-te ho dee-waa-ne kii ta-rah ab tum

kyoN phirte rehte ho deewaane kii tarah ab tum?!


:rose

[shummu]

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Asslam-o-Alikum!

Phecle misre ko psand krne ka shukriya
Ab me ne aik or misra likha hai.
Ye durost hai ya nhi zror btaye ga.
http://www.pegham.com/attachment.php...1&d=1216038476

ws...aap ki doosri koshish bhi dkeh kar behad khushi hui magar is baar aap chook gayin zara sa...misra be behr reh gaya...

ye bataayein aap ke naam ka talaffuz kya hai..?

tah-rah(2-2)

ya

ta-hi-rah??(1 1 2)

khair filhaal mein 'taahrah' use kar rahi hun...

sehni paRengi zamaane ki sakhtiyaaN 'taahrah'
'kaha tha kisne ke ahd-e-vafaa karo unse'

ise is wazan mein laate hain...

ma faa i lun, fa i laa tun, ma faa i lun ,fa i lun (fe' lun)
1 2 1 2, 1 1 2 2 ,1 2 1 2 ,1 1 2 (2 2)


uThaani hongi zamaane ki sakhtiyaaN 'taahrah'(correct misra)
'kaha tha kisne ke ahd-e-vafaa karo unse'


ab is sher ko is ghazal ke tarz pe gunguna kar dekhiye :)

har aik baat pe kehte ho tum ke tuu kyaa hai
tumheeN kaho k ye andaaz-e-guftuggu kyaa hai

laga na ek hi tune mein hai?? :D:

[Aarzo]

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wow nice thread

[shummu]

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bahut achchi girah hai magar be behr hai...koshish karti hun ise behr mein laane ki..

1 2 1 2, 1 1 2 2 ,1 2 1 2 ,1 1 2 (2 2)
pataa tha badle meiN milniN thiN azyateiN tum ko