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Re: Afsana: Shama
bohat shukriya :ff:
bohat shukriya :ff:
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Re: Afsana: Shama
Sameera
aaj buhat din baad idhar aana hua
aap ka afsana paRha
kuch paragraphs buhat pasand aaye
aur kuch tanqeed
afsaane ka matan unwaan se mutabiqat nahiN rakhta
agar is ka unwaan "saahir" hota to ziyada behtar thaa
aap ne caani ko shuru meN pied piper se tashbeeh di hai
magar afsaane ke ikht'taam per aap ka pied piper naaz ko apne sahar meN karne ki bajaaye khud us ki khawhishaat ke mutaabiq business man ban jaata hai
yeh sirf mera khayal hai aap ka is se muttafiq hona zaroori nahiN
wasalam
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Re: Afsana: Shama
awesome dear:phool:
kabhi kabhi hum apney app sey mohabbat krney waloo ko un ki behtri k khatir hi choordetey hain pr yeh sub krk khud ko kitni bari aziiyat dey letey haiin prs hayed yehi mohabbat hai.!Comment
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