On the verge of life

[Mr. Sialkoty]

[Insaaan]

Re: On the verge of life

haah its great
but i m sure that you cant understand that you write
its all dictionary words that you chose
any way some good thinking...
write to b simple that every one easy read what u want to say..
i think that you are going to show ur english..proficiency but..

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

haah its great
but i m sure that you cant understand that you write
its all dictionary words that you chose
any way some good thinking...
write to b simple that every one easy read what u want to say..
i think that you are going to show ur english..proficiency but..

[saraah]

Re: On the verge of life

MY GOD.......what an imaginary flight....n way of exxpression....mind blowing.....i felt as if ihv seen my last moments....my closing eyes.....with open eyes.....superb man.:thmbup::thmbup:

[Pakiza]

Re: On the verge of life

wow
awesome field set
reading through one does feel the intensity of the verge of life described
the flow of words captures the reader's mind
suparb piece of writing shared

[MeemSheenAlif]

Re: On the verge of life

very nice teacher :thmbup:
simple awesome

specially the first part...andt he sentence...
My ears were almost malfunctioning; all sounds, except a stormy roar, ceased
is amazing..i dont know y but i love reading and writing these type of sentence in my writing alot...even the last word in these sentences sometimes changes the whole meaning of ur writng....and u use it very well....

and the way u link between first and second part is simply fantabulous...
but i am unable to catch ur point when u said
Even my mouth could sense the frequency of garbled noises
i mean how can this be possible :hehe:

last ..how u manged to memorised such difficult word...i used dictionary several time while reading this

kher usta'ad u rocks

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

MY GOD.......what an imaginary flight....n way of exxpression....mind blowing.....i felt as if ihv seen my last moments....my closing eyes.....with open eyes.....superb man.:thmbup::thmbup:

Hi Allah

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

wow
awesome field set
reading through one does feel the intensity of the verge of life described
the flow of words captures the reader's mind
suparb piece of writing shared

Thank you for your precious words :)

[ummid]

Re: On the verge of life

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

very nice teacher :thmbup:
simple awesome

specially the first part...andt he sentence...
My ears were almost malfunctioning; all sounds, except a stormy roar, ceased
is amazing..i dont know y but i love reading and writing these type of sentence in my writing alot...even the last word in these sentences sometimes changes the whole meaning of ur writng....and u use it very well....

and the way u link between first and second part is simply fantabulous...
but i am unable to catch ur point when u said
Even my mouth could sense the frequency of garbled noises
i mean how can this be possible :hehe:

last ..how u manged to memorised such difficult word...i used dictionary several time while reading this

kher usta'ad u rocks

My dear Sha'geedar, writing is an art and I am making an effort to learn it. It sounds you read it ardently. Thank you for your words of appreciation and whereas your second point is concerned let me explain you my philosophy behind it :khi:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

I can imagine the intensity you faced during your hospital days. May God bless you and give you happy, healthy and prosperous life. :phool:

[pakgates]

Re: On the verge of life

I wanted to cry like hell as I was feeling a lot of burden onto my very heart as it wanted to burst out releasing it from the ambush. My voice was getting faint and down by instance as if I was chucked and roving through the subterranean murky well. An unseen divine force was dragging me away; where, no one knows; indubitably I was inept to appraise that force. An intense sheath of misty fog surrounded my bulging eyes eventually giving rise to crimson gray clouds that began welling up. My ears were almost malfunctioning; all sounds, except a stormy roar, ceased. Even my mouth could sense the frequency of garbled noises and my conscience was fading steadily. My limbs were frozen and my lungs unable to clutch lungful of air. Where are you mom? I cried. Why not you rescue me, I am your loving baby. My dad, my friends, my siblings, why not you come forward to escape me from this trap. Escape me else I will be taken too far and wouldn’t be back - till eternity. Then I danced without knowing steps and when I stopped I found myself lament and my eyes tearing because at least I recognized, “I am going to have an eternal life from now on”, said to myself. I was helpless though contented and then there was a very long, hushed, peaceful though my last breath.

(by me)

marvelous selection of words, very good written, keep it up :thmbup:

:clap::clap::clap:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: On the verge of life

marvelous selection of words, very good written, keep it up :thmbup:

:clap::clap::clap:

Thanks brother

[Gul]

Re: On the verge of life

Speechless....! Not the Vocabulary counts here
but the feelings Behind the words ..
Oh God