Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

[Yaaram]

Asslamoalikum
Aik Koshish hay umeed hay ke nazar sani karne ka baad sab apni ara se nawazein ge shukrya :)

[khurram_shaikh]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Assalaam o alekum,

waah waah yaaram bahooot khoob bahoot hi laajwaab kooshish hai aapki her sher zabardast hai dili daad qabool karien khush rahien

[hayaa_n]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Har shair bouhat pasand aaya laikin mujhay Maqqta bouhat hi umda laga.:)
Saansai'n toot rahi hai'n phir bhi hay intizaar taira


Bouhat khoob-:masha :)

[Yaaram]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Hayaa_n aur Khurram bhai aap donOn ki pazeerayi ka bohat shukrya :)

[Baad-e-Saba]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

:thmbup:

[Yaaram]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Shukrya Saba :rose

[haziq]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Mera khayaal hay k thori c koshish aur karni paray gee
nice try

[Yaaram]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

G keu nai :) koshish hi to zindgee hay:) Thanx

[vajiha]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

ye kiyon hamesha meri talab hi tumhain sada de
kabhi to khud bhi spurdgi ki thakan main ayo!
shagufta gul ki sada main ,range chaman main ayo
koi bhi rut ho , bahar ke perahan main ayo !
koi safar ho , tumhi ko manzil samagh ke jaun
koi musafat ho , tum meri hi lagan main ayo !
kabhi to esa ho ke logon ki bat sun ker
meri taraf tum raqabton ki jalan main ayo !
kabhi to khud bhi sapurdgi ki thakan main ayo !

[gazal_uzma]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

bohot hi khoob khas tor pay matla bohot pasand aaya

thanks

regards
uzma khan

[Yaaram]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Shukrya Uzma :)

[Rai]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

wahooooo yaaram very nice

[Yaaram]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

Shukrya aap ka :)

[Gul]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

yehan agar jaan ki amaaan paaoon tu kuch arz karoon

Mind mutt kijay gaa mein nay issay ek Qaari ki hasiyat se parha hai ...
.mein koi mahir tu nahi ..... magar
Last two shers mein
radeef qafiya kuch mukhtalif ho giya hai .....

Kia aap ko aisa nahi lagta Bhai!???????
Jaisay k ....start mein ..

nahi howa jata
Nahi diya jata...
hai phir ...last two shers mein
Toraa nahi jata
Jiyaa nahi jataa....

Inn Ko b agar ......Nahi toraa jata
.................aur........Nahi Jiya jaata ... kar dein tu..............:cc:

i think ....bass yehi theek nahi baqi ..idea acha hai ...Soft emotions hein iss mein ! :) ..

[Yaaram]

Re: Tere Gham se Na Ashna nahi hua Jata..!!

shukrya - i will try to improve :)