Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

[Yaaram]

Asslmaoalikum :rose
aik nihayat saadgi main lihki hoi aik ghzal pesh hay......umeed hay ke pasand aaye gi

[withlove]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Bohat khoob Yaram sahib.. bohat achi kawish hai .. mashq jari rakhiye.. aur bhi nikhar aaye ga InshAllah.. soch main bohat damm hai bus qalam ki nok palak sanwar lijiye to kya hi kehnay ... ghazal ke sab se pehlay aur nihayat zaroori ajzaa.. qafiya aur radeef hein.. aap ki ghazal ka radeef to bohat hi shandar hai .. per qafiye kahee'n kahee'n ghayab hai .. so thori si nazar-e-sani se.. Bohat achi ghazal ban sakti hai ..... agar gustakhi lagi ho .. to mazrat kha hein.. aap ka Behad Shukria..:rose

wafa aur dua ke saath
withlove :rose

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Bohat khoob Yaram sahib.. bohat achi kawish hai .. mashq jari rakhiye.. aur bhi nikhar aaye ga InshAllah.. soch main bohat damm hai bus qalam ki nok palak sanwar lijiye to kya hi kehnay ... ghazal ke sab se pehlay aur nihayat zaroori ajzaa.. qafiya aur radeef hein.. aap ki ghazal ka radeef to bohat hi shandar hai .. per qafiye kahee'n kahee'n ghayab hai .. so thori si nazar-e-sani se.. Bohat achi ghazal ban sakti hai ..... agar gustakhi lagi ho .. to mazrat kha hein.. aap ka Behad Shukria..:rose

wafa aur dua ke saath
withlove :rose

Jee withlove nihayat shukyra .......main sharing isi lye hi karta hoOn ke mujey meri khamyoN ka pata chale nahi to sharing karne ka kya faeda :D

[ShAnI]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Asslmaoalikum :rose
aik nihayat saadgi main lihki hoi aik ghzal pesh hay......umeed hay ke pasand aaye gi

Janab Khyaal apka buhat khoobsorat hai isi liyay nazam bhe pyari hai ... shairi kay asoolon kay baray mein to mujhay kuch bhe nahien pata per kahien kuch kami hai apki shairi mein flow kay saath likhtay rahiyay sahi ho jayay gi

Muskuratay rahiyay

ShAnI :rose

['SamRazi']

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Tumhari Bewafayi dasti hai mujhe Sham dhaley



buhut zabardast likha hai Adnan :thmbup:

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Janab Khyaal apka buhat khoobsorat hai isi liyay nazam bhe pyari hai ... shairi kay asoolon kay baray mein to mujhay kuch bhe nahien pata per kahien kuch kami hai apki shairi mein flow kay saath likhtay rahiyay sahi ho jayay gi

Muskuratay rahiyay

ShAnI :rose

InshAllah jee :)

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Tumhari Bewafayi dasti hai mujhe Sham dhaley



buhut zabardast likha hai Adnan :thmbup:

Shukraya Saima pasnad karne ka :)

[Berhi_Bee]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

zeberdestt

[muskaan]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

bauhat hi khubsurat ghazal likhi hai aap nai :) har aik lafz mein dard nazar ata hai :)

khush rahiyai :)

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

zeberdestt

Berhi bee pasnd karne ks shukrya :)

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

bauhat hi khubsurat ghazal likhi hai aap nai :) har aik lafz mein dard nazar ata hai :)

khush rahiyai :)

Bohat shukrya muskaan pasnd karne ka :rose ...dard to humara asasa hay

[ghurob-e-aftab]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

W/salam

janab aik bar phir buhat achi kosish :),,,

khush rahoo ..

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

W/salam

janab aik bar phir buhat achi kosish :),,,

khush rahoo ..

Bohat shukrya gharoob-e-Aftab pasnd karne ka ...Zara nawazi hay aapki :)

[muskaan]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

Bohat shukrya muskaan pasnd karne ka :rose ...dard to humara asasa hay

wohi app ki nazmoon mein numaya hota hai :rose khush rahiyai :)

[Yaaram]

Re: Meri Udaasi mujh se poochti hay..!!

wohi app ki nazmoon mein numaya hota hai :rose khush rahiyai :)

acha jee bari koshish karte hain ke kam ho lekan ........