aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

[shummu]

Salaam ahl-e-bazm ek aur nayi ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai :rose


maiN ne kabhee jo dekhe haiN sapne bahaar ke
manzar nazar meN ghoom gaye Khaar-zaar ke

kyuN tum ho intizaar meiN yuN Gham Gusaar ke?!
dekho kabhii KHUDAA ko bhi dil se pukaar ke

kitnii ujar gayi hoon maiN tere firaaq meiN
nazroN se dekh parda-e-nafrat utaar ke

aansoo bataa rahe haiN mujhe uske dil ka haal
'Woh jaa raha hai koi shab-e-Gham guzaar ke'

dil ke udaas panchi khabar de rahe haiN ye
mausam badal rahe haiN dil-e-khushgawaar ke

dete haiN bhook meiN mujhe raahat wahi samar
toRaa tha jinko maine kabhii sang maar ke

saaya shadeed dhoop meiN dete haiN woh mujhe
kyoNkar na hoN azeez shajar kuu-e-yaar ke

dil ko saraaye samjhaa thaa shayad :Shumaa'ilah:
aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke


aap ki aara ki muntazir,
Shumaila :)

[hayaa_n]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Salaam ahl-e-bazm ek aur nayi ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai :rose


maiN ne kabhee jo dekhe haiN sapne bahaar ke
manzar nazar meN ghoom gaye Khaar-zaar ke

kyuN tum ho intizaar meiN yuN Gham Gusaar ke?!
dekho kabhii KHUDAA ko bhi dil se pukaar ke

kitnii ujar gayi hoon maiN tere firaaq meiN
nazroN se dekh parda-e-nafrat utaar ke

aansoo bataa rahe haiN mujhe uske dil ka haal
'Woh jaa raha hai koi shab-e-Gham guzaar ke'

dil ke udaas panchi khabar de rahe haiN ye
mausam badal rahe haiN dil-e-khushgawaar ke

dete haiN bhook meiN mujhe raahat wahi samar
toRaa tha jinko maine kabhii sang maar ke

saaya shadeed dhoop meiN dete haiN woh mujhe
kyoNkar na hoN azeez shajar kuu-e-yaar ke

dil ko saraaye samjhaa thaa shayad :Shumaa'ilah:
aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke


aap ki aara ki muntazir,
Shumaila :)

Shumaila ji no doubt kay aap aik umda shaaira hain..jo bhi kalaam read kiya hay us ka koi aik shair bhi aisa nahi k kahun yeh ziyada umda hay, yeh waala khaas nahi..aap ka sara kalaam mujhay bouhat pasand aaya hay jo k saaf zahir karta hay k :masha aik umda shaaira ko is waqt read kar rahi hun.Bouhat dili Daad qubool kijye.:thmbup:

[shummu]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Adaab Dear hayaa sis..aap ne baDi himmat baRhaayi hai meri ...jab ek banda bhi aap ke kalaam ko sahi maayne mein paRhke use mehsoos karke reply de to baDi khushi hoti hi aur aisa lagta hai jaise aap kimehnat wasool ho gayi..ap khud mashaAllah bahut achcha likhti hain.aap ki jaanib se daad paa ke aur bhi achcha lagta hai..thank u soo very much HAYAA sis... :rose :rose

[khurram_shaikh]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Assalaam o alekum,

waaah bahot khoob bahoot hi umdeh kalaam likhaa aur share kiyaa shummu raani tumnien jaisa ke hayaa nien kahaa ke koee ek ashaar nahin balke pooori ke poori ghazal hi khobsoorat hai :thmbup: tumhien perhnien ki ab aadat se banti jaa rahi hai khoob likhoo aur aise hi sabki daad o tehseen qabool kerti raho khush raho sada

[shummu]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Assalaam o alekum,

waaah bahot khoob bahoot hi umdeh kalaam likhaa aur share kiyaa shummu raani tumnien jaisa ke hayaa nien kahaa ke koee ek ashaar nahin balke pooori ke poori ghazal hi khobsoorat hai :thmbup: tumhien perhnien ki ab aadat se banti jaa rahi hai khoob likhoo aur aise hi sabki daad o tehseen qabool kerti raho khush raho sada

w'salaam!

shukriya bahut bahut Khurram jee..aap ki jaanib se daad paa ke baDi apnaaiyat ka ehsaas hota hai..:) main aap ki mamnoon hoon keh aap hamesha meir hausla afzaayi farmaate rehte hain.....shukriya :rose

Shumaila

[Yaaram]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

wah shummaila ............jee wah bohat umdah .....:) kamal likhti ho jab bhi likhti ho :)

[shummu]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Thanx a lot Adnan...aap ki be saakhta daad dene ka andaaz bahut pasand aaya...shukriya :)

[baykamal]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(wah wah)

Assalaam o alaikum
kya acha shair hay. aur kya acha shair hay.

kyuN tum ho intizaar meiN yuN Gham Gusaar ke?!
dekho kabhii KHUDAA ko bhi dil se pukaar ke

bohat hi zabardast bhy bohat achay kya baat hay. kya baat hay ???
hehehe. mazaq k ilawa kya baat hay bohat achay. tum zara aas paas hoti to kuch inaam waghaira daita.
agar tum poestess of pegham k liay ummeed waar ho to maiN tumhaiN best poetess k liay vote b doon. agar tum achi shaaeri shuru kar do. hehehehe. tum waqaee bohat achi shaaera ho.

tumharay liay dua hay k aisay hi shair likhti raho...
khurram bhaee aap chat b aaya kijiay aur shu tum b aao guppaiN maaraiN gae...theek

Wassalaam
Raza Baykamal

[.]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Salaam ahl-e-bazm ek aur nayi ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai :rose


maiN ne kabhee jo dekhe haiN sapne bahaar ke
manzar nazar meN ghoom gaye Khaar-zaar ke

kyuN tum ho intizaar meiN yuN Gham Gusaar ke?!
dekho kabhii KHUDAA ko bhi dil se pukaar ke

kitnii ujar gayi hoon maiN tere firaaq meiN
nazroN se dekh parda-e-nafrat utaar ke

aansoo bataa rahe haiN mujhe uske dil ka haal
'Woh jaa raha hai koi shab-e-Gham guzaar ke'

dil ke udaas panchi khabar de rahe haiN ye
mausam badal rahe haiN dil-e-khushgawaar ke

dete haiN bhook meiN mujhe raahat wahi samar
toRaa tha jinko maine kabhii sang maar ke

saaya shadeed dhoop meiN dete haiN woh mujhe
kyoNkar na hoN azeez shajar kuu-e-yaar ke

dil ko saraaye samjhaa thaa shayad :Shumaa'ilah:
aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke


aap ki aara ki muntazir,
Shumaila :)

koon juda hoo gia main title deekh kay jaldi jaldi andar a gai deekhnay key leye :D

:thmbup: :rose

[shummu]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(wah wah)

Assalaam o alaikum
kya acha shair hay. aur kya acha shair hay.

kyuN tum ho intizaar meiN yuN Gham Gusaar ke?!
dekho kabhii KHUDAA ko bhi dil se pukaar ke

bohat hi zabardast bhy bohat achay kya baat hay. kya baat hay ???
hehehe. mazaq k ilawa kya baat hay bohat achay. tum zara aas paas hoti to kuch inaam waghaira daita.
agar tum poestess of pegham k liay ummeed waar ho to maiN tumhaiN best poetess k liay vote b doon. agar tum achi shaaeri shuru kar do. hehehehe. tum waqaee bohat achi shaaera ho.

tumharay liay dua hay k aisay hi shair likhti raho...
khurram bhaee aap chat b aaya kijiay aur shu tum b aao guppaiN maaraiN gae...theek

Wassalaam
Raza Baykamal

uffo ek to samajh nahi aata keh tum taareef kar rahe ho ya buraayi lolz....ajeeb dhang se daad dete ho :tomato:


waise thanxx ke tum aaye to...aur itniiiiiiiiiiiiiii daad se nwaaaza bhi....bahut hi achcha laga sacchi...:rose


Shumaila

[shummu]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

koon juda hoo gia main title deekh kay jaldi jaldi andar a gai deekhnay key leye :D

:thmbup: :rose

lolzzzzzzzzzzz:lol tum bhi na ...lol :tauba

[sarah_rafeeq2003]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Such a nice poetry.:phool:

[shummu]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

Thanx SARAH jee....

[Mani16]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

me ne kabhi jo dekhay hain sapnay behaar k,

Bilkul siutablity nhi hy janab
zraa ghor karen
haan Dekhe thay agar ho tu kuch jamta hy

Filhaal tu isi ek shair pe he comment doonga
wese second or 1st line me me bhi mutabikat nhi bn rehi mere hisab se

[*Hala*]

Re: aakhir judaa wo ho gayaa kuch din guzaar ke(nayi ghazal)

very nice...