hamd-i-baari taalaa

[Mujahid Khan]

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

salam:salam::rose

buhat zabardast kaawish hai aap ki..dill ko parh kay kaaafi itmeenaan naseeb hua...!
main aik choti si guzaaarish keerna chahoon ga...wo yay hai..kay
iss shair main" jo tu nai to lahm-e-dil ko bhi sangdill bana diya"...sangdill word kuch ajeeb sa lag raha hai...!..may be "sung" zyada suit keray...!
anyways buhat achi hamd...!:thmbup:
keep it up...and keep sharing...plz!:rose

[Mujahid Khan]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

salam:salam::rose

buhat zabardast kaawish hai aap ki..dill ko parh kay kaaafi itmeenaan naseeb hua...!
main aik choti si guzaaarish keerna chahoon ga...wo yay hai..kay
iss shair main" jo tu nai to lahm-e-dil ko bhi sangdill bana diya"...sangdill word kuch ajeeb sa lag raha hai...!..may be "sung" zyada suit keray...!
anyways buhat achi hamd...!:thmbup:
keep it up...and keep sharing...plz!:rose

sher ali bhai aap k khoobsoorat coments pardh kar bohot khushi hui,aur aap ki khoobsoorat tanqeed par bhi kaafi ghor ki tho socha k aap ko wazahat kar doon
jiss dil may tu basey woh rehem dil hai bohot
jo tu nahi tho lahm-i-dil ko he sangdil bana dia

yani jiss dil may khuda aur khof-i-khudaa hota hai woh bohot narm aur rehem dil hota hai,jiss dil may khuda aur khof-i-khudaa nahi khuda uss par moher laga deta hai,phhir uss pay koi naseehat koi cheez asar nahi karti aur woh gosht k dil say pattther ka bun jaata hai:thmbup:

[Wafa]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

MashAllah bohot he khoobsurat hamd likhe hai....ye hamd tu poori bohot achi likhe hai.....jitni tareef karo kam hai......:clap:...parh kar bohot bohot he acha laga........sachi mai.....aap tu har tarha ke poetry kar laitay ho...Allah talah aap ko aur likhnay ke taufeek day.....hamesha khush rahein aur isse tarha apni superb poetry hamaray saath share kartay rahay.........:thmbup:

[Mujahid Khan]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

MashAllah bohot he khoobsurat hamd likhe hai....ye hamd tu poori bohot achi likhe hai.....jitni tareef karo kam hai......:clap:...parh kar bohot bohot he acha laga........sachi mai.....aap tu har tarha ke poetry kar laitay ho...Allah talah aap ko aur likhnay ke taufeek day.....hamesha khush rahein aur isse tarha apni superb poetry hamaray saath share kartay rahay.........:thmbup:

wafa aap ki hosla afzaai ,itnay khoobsoorat coments aur dil ki gehrai say pasand karnay k liyee aap ka maqrooz-u-mashkoor hoonthmbup:

[aquari]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

:clap:..bauht hi khobsorat goo k us Zaat ki hamd mumkin nahi...mager app ney apney tur bauht hi khoobsoorat koshish ki haii:)

[zmufti]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

Jazak Allah

Mujahid saheb
aap ne buhat achche mazameen ka intkhaab kiyya hai
daad qabool kijye
2-3 ghalatiaN heN
pehle misre meN "taskheer-e-kaainaat " likhiye
kaainaat-ee taskheer ka matlab hai taskheer ki kaainaat jis ke koi maani nahiN
teesray misre meN kamand aap ne chote kaaf se likha hai jabk yeh baRe qaaf se hota hai
aaThvaaN misre meN bhee ya to typing ki ghalati hai ya maiN is ka matlab nahiN samajh paayii
regards
zmufti
maiN shayad yeh tabsara na karti magar jab aap shayeri karte heN to urdu ki imla aur tarakeeb ka istemaal bhee durust hona chahiye
ghalati har insaan se hoti hai aur insaan ghalati se hi seekhta hai

[Mujahid Khan]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

:clap:..bauht hi khobsorat goo k us Zaat ki hamd mumkin nahi...mager app ney apney tur bauht hi khoobsoorat koshish ki haii:)

baishak aquari ji uss zaat ki hammd bayan say baahir hai bus humari aik adna si koshish thih jo aap ko pasan i jiss k liyee main aap ka bohot mashkoor-u-mamnoon hoon,khush rahiyee thmbup:

[Mujahid Khan]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

Jazak Allah

Mujahid saheb
aap ne buhat achche mazameen ka intkhaab kiyya hai
daad qabool kijye
2-3 ghalatiaN heN
pehle misre meN "taskheer-e-kaainaat " likhiye
kaainaat-ee taskheer ka matlab hai taskheer ki kaainaat jis ke koi maani nahiN
teesray misre meN kamand aap ne chote kaaf se likha hai jabk yeh baRe qaaf se hota hai
aaThvaaN misre meN bhee ya to typing ki ghalati hai ya maiN is ka matlab nahiN samajh paayii
regards
zmufti
maiN shayad yeh tabsara na karti magar jab aap shayeri karte heN to urdu ki imla aur tarakeeb ka istemaal bhee durust hona chahiye
ghalati har insaan se hoti hai aur insaan ghalati se hi seekhta hai

bohot bohot shukria zmufti ji aap ki hosla afzaai aur khaas kar tasheeh k liyee :thmbup:

[lucky]

Re: hamd-i-baari taalaa

mashallah bohat khoobsoorat hamd hai
keep it up