*Izhaar na krna aya*

[A.h.khan]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

sallam
bahot khob jab dil se awaz nikalti hae to dard ka ehsas hota zaror hae
khin dil ke kone se jo darad obhar ke bahar aya hae who lafzon ki jis zanzeer main somoya hae who andaz bahot khob hae main dua go honh ap ke liye kion ke dil pe lage zakham bahot aziyat dete hain ;;;
meri aek dost ne jate hoye ye likh ke de gai thi mujhe

jam pe jam pine se fayda kuch nahi,,,,,
rat bahr pi subh ko utar jae gi,,,,,
gar to do ghont meri nazron se pi le,,,,,
omar sari nasye main guzar jae gi,,,,



to ye nasa hi hae jo dil main khlish ban ke rhe jati hae

ap ke liye du gorose:rose

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

theek keh rahay ho

[WASI ANJUM]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Zabardast jia bahoot achha likhti hain aap

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Very nice waiting for another one

[jia]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Thanx to all of u
b happy:rose

[jia]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Jia saheba
aik achchi koshish ke liye daad qabool kijye
ghazal meN jazbaat ke saath ilfaaz ki bhee rawaani hai
gar ijazat ho to kuch technical baatieN arz kar duuN

aap ne apni ghazal meN jo qawafi istemaal kiyye heN vo heN

izhar, piyar, iqrar, deedaar, bezaar, ikhtiaar shumaar,inkaar, aah-o-zaar, dildaar, talabgaar , baar, yaadgaar

in meN izhar,iqrar,bezar,inkaar,dildaar, har baar ham qaafia heN

jabk shumaar aur piyar ham qafia heN

ikhtiar ke ham qaafia ilfaaz yaadgaar, intzaar aur beqrar

aah-o-zaar sahih lafz nahiN hai
aah-o-zaari durust hai

aap ke har sher ka doosra misra youN hai

hamieN..........na karna aaya

to blank per aisa hi lafz aa sakta hai jo pehlay ka hamwazn ho

filhaal itna hi
regards
zmufti

Thanx alot sis
next time main in ghaltion ka dhiyan rakhoon ge or koshish karoon ge k yeh sab na ho:)
thanx once again
b happy:rose

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Jia next kab tak likho ge

[jia]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Jia next kab tak likho ge

abhi tk to kuch nahi pata

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

kuch likho bhoat acha likhti ho
mein bhi likhta tha
kuch likha phir chore diya
2 or 3
bus
likan ab kuch lagta ha start karon

[jia]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

kuch likho bhoat acha likhti ho
mein bhi likhta tha
kuch likha phir chore diya
2 or 3
bus
likan ab kuch lagta ha start karon

thanx alot:rose
likhoon ge zaror likhon ge:lpop:
laikin kuch wqt to lagy ga he na:comfort:
app apni koshish jari rakhooo
kuch to ho ga he na:comfort:

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

:insha:

[*Hijab*]

Re: *Izhaar na krna aya*

Assalamo-Alekam, very well done Jia ji, bohat khubsurat likha hai aap ne