yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

[Fatima Asad]

aslaam_u_alikam

yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui
aur duaa koi baa acar na houi

esey uljhey terey jhameiloN main
zindagi tujh ko bhi khabar na huii

qissa-e-dard jaante the sab
be.khabar ! bas tujhe khabar na houi

umr bhar uljhanon ko suljhaaya
do ghari chein sey basar nah houi

khavaahishein to hazaar thiin lekin
aik bhi poori umr bhar na hui

her gharee deep hum jalaatey rahey
per khushi ki kabhi saHar na houi

[Yaaram]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

kamal likha hay aap ne Fatimah :) Aik Aik lafz umdah :) mazeed ka wait rahe ga :)

[Fatima Asad]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

kamal likha hay aap ne Fatimah :) Aik Aik lafz umdah :) mazeed ka wait rahe ga :)

aslaam_u_Alikam

bohat shukriya yaaram

['SamRazi']

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

esey uljhey terey jhameiloN main
zindagi tujh ko bhi khabar na huii

qissa-e-dard jaante the sab
be.khabar ! bas tujhe khabar na houi

umr bhar uljhanon ko suljhaaya
do ghari chein sey basar nah houi

:masha buhut khoob Fatima :)

yeh ashar zada pasand aayeh :thmbup:

[Eshaa Chaudhry]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

aslaam_u_alikam

yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui
aur duaa koi baa acar na houi

esey uljhey terey jhameiloN main
zindagi tujh ko bhi khabar na huii

qissa-e-dard jaante the sab
be.khabar ! bas tujhe khabar na houi

umr bhar uljhanon ko suljhaaya
do ghari chein sey basar nah houi

khavaahishein to hazaar thiin lekin
aik bhi poori umr bhar na hui

her gharee deep hum jalaatey rahey
per khushi ki kabhi saHar na houi

Adaab!!!
bohat khoob ... bohat umdah ...likhty hain aap:phool:

[Fatima Asad]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

:masha buhut khoob Fatima :)

yeh ashar zada pasand aayeh :thmbup:

aslaam_u_Alikam

shukriya miss magnet

agar main galati per nahin hun to tum saima ho ?

[Muhammad Khalil]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

wow its nice

[Fatima Asad]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

Adaab!!!
bohat khoob ... bohat umdah ...likhty hain aap:phool:

aslaam_u_Alikam

thanks esha

[Fatima Asad]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

salaam Faatimah :rose

aapkii Ghazal paRhii aur pasand bhii aayii magar bahr/vazan kaa masla nazar aayaa...Ghazal ke taqreeban har ash'aar kaa pahla misr'a ek bahr emN hai to dusraa misr'a duusrii bahr meN hai...ash'aar ke misr'oN ke maa bain kahiiN kahiiN Khayaal kii ham-aahangii aur rab-e-baahamii emN Khalal nazar aayaa. mere Khayaal se aapke andar shaa'iraana salaaHiyateN haiN magar unheN zaraa ba-too-e-kaar laane kii ashadd zaroorat hai

ummeed hai k aapko merii baateN naa-gawaar na guzrii hoNgii kiuNki meraa maqsad tanqeed yaa tanqees qata'ii nahiiN hai...yeh maHez ek dostaana sujhaao thaa...bas! phir bhii agar baat naa-guzeer guzrii ho to maiN ma'zarat_Khaah huuN...shukria :rose

_______Jhumroo

aslaam_u_alikam

jhumroo saahib shukriya ,
jahan tak rahi baat behr main na honey ki to raj kumar saahib jesey ustaad shaair ney bhi is main behr ki koi galati nahin nikaali:)

aap ki raaye ka shukriya

[ArAbIaN gIrL]

Re: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui

awesome



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