mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

[SherAli]

salaamaat,
ummeed hai k mizaaj-e-giraamii ba_Kahir hoNge :)

apne chand qit'aaat aapke zauq kii nazar kartaa huN...ummed hai k shaayad aapke aalaa zarf ko naa-gawaar na guzre. aapkii aaraa o tanqeed o tanqees kaa shiddat se intizaar rahegaa. Hasb-e-ma'mool Khowaandgii ke liye peshgii shukria adaa kar rahaa huN.

to, qita'aat mulaaHizah farmaaiye:

faqat Khaak_nashiiN,
_______Sheroo :)


1.
gungunaa kar Haafize meN she'r bhar letaa huN maiN
ya'nii kuchh phusphuse ash'aar kah letaa huN maiN
is taraH likkhii huii tuk_bandiyoN ko jab yahaN
kah rahe haiN shaa'irii to naaz kar letaa huN maiN :)

2.
dil se tasavvuraat kii lazzat na chhiiniiye
jalvoN kii pur suroor lataafat na chhiiniiye
rahtaa huN maHv apne KhayaaloN meN har ghaRii
mujh se taKhaiyulaat kii daulat na chhiiniiye


3.
ro ke GhairoN ko haNsaa saktaa huN maiN
haNs ke apnoN ko rulaa saktaa huN maiN
'aql meN go hai mire deevaanaapan
kaam kii baateN sunaa saktaa huN maiN

4.
mausam bhii, chaman bhii, kaliyaan bhii.....kaalii sii gahTaayeN, shaam bhii ho!
seene meN taRaptii yaad bhii ho.....hoNToN pe tumhaaraa naam bhii ho!
aise meN tumhaarii gar mujh par.....paR jaaye nigaah-e-mast o HasiiN
aaNkhoN kii hamaarii pyaas bujhe.....dukh-dard miTe, aaraam bhii ho!

5.
terii yaad meN kaTii to kaTii is taraH shab-e-Gham
kabhii shamm'a tilmilaaii, kabhii kaaNp kar huii kam
kabhii qatre raushnee ke vahaaN ashk ban ke Tapke
kabhii aah bhar ke roye, kabhii thaam kar jigar ham! :(

[WASI ANJUM]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

Waah bahot khoob janab bahot achha likha hai

[SherAli]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

Waah bahot khoob janab bahot achha likha hai

aapkaa be_had shukria k aapne pasand farmaayaa...shukria :)

[Ehsaas786]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

v.v,nice janaab

[SherAli]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

v.v,nice janaab

AHsaas saHiba aapkaa maiN shukr-guzaar huN k aapne merii adnaa sii kaaviishaat ko saraaha...thank you!

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

salaamaat,
ummeed hai k mizaaj-e-giraamii ba_Kahir hoNge :)

apne chand qit'aaat aapke zauq kii nazar kartaa huN...ummed hai k shaayad aapke aalaa zarf ko naa-gawaar na guzre. aapkii aaraa o tanqeed o tanqees kaa shiddat se intizaar rahegaa. Hasb-e-ma'mool Khowaandgii ke liye peshgii shukria adaa kar rahaa huN.

to, qita'aat mulaaHizah farmaaiye:

faqat Khaak_nashiiN,
_______Sheroo :)


1.
gungunaa kar Haafize meN she'r bhar letaa huN maiN
ya'nii kuchh phusphuse ash'aar kah letaa huN maiN
is taraH likkhii huii tuk_bandiyoN ko jab yahaN
kah rahe haiN shaa'irii to naaz kar letaa huN maiN :)

yani kamal hai sahib

aap sab ko raggaR gay na

Kher ...aap Ki TUkk-Bandi ..achi lagi
magar naaz mutt farma-eyya kion k

Jo Bhe NAAZ walay hein
NA-RAAz ho jaein gay !!

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

2.
dil se tasavvuraat kii lazzat na chhiiniiye
jalvoN kii pur suroor lataafat na chhiiniiye
rahtaa huN maHv apne KhayaaloN meN har ghaRii
mujh se taKhaiyulaat kii daulat na chhiiniiye

Aap panay Takhayulaat ko Bank mein jama karwa dijay :)

anyway ..takhyul hee tu hota hai jo sirf hamara hai ..baqi............
tu Alfaaz b nahi apnay janab!

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

salaamaat,

3.
ro ke GhairoN ko haNsaa saktaa huN maiN
haNs ke apnoN ko rulaa saktaa huN maiN
'aql meN go hai mire deevaanaapan
kaam kii baateN sunaa saktaa huN maiN

Tasleemat janaab

aap apnoun ko kion rulatay hein ..kia aap ki hansii !????? 372-shock

:lahoul





:embarasse

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

4.
mausam bhii, chaman bhii, kaliyaan bhii.....kaalii sii gahTaayeN, shaam bhii ho!
seene meN taRaptii yaad bhii ho.....hoNToN pe tumhaaraa naam bhii ho!
aise meN tumhaarii gar mujh par.....paR jaaye nigaah-e-mast o HasiiN
aaNkhoN kii hamaarii pyaas bujhe.....dukh-dard miTe, aaraam bhii ho!

Buhat hee lateef baat
magar sher mein itnay DOTS..................

kia wazan ko balance karnay k liyay hein


:) .......................:thmbup:

[SherAli]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

yani kamal hai sahib

aap sab ko raggaR gay na

Kher ...aap Ki TUkk-Bandi ..achi lagi
magar naaz mutt farma-eyya kion k

Jo Bhe NAAZ walay hein
NA-RAAz ho jaein gay !!

shukria Gul saaHiba aapkaa k aapne tuk-bandii ko bhii saraahaa...bajaa farmaayaa naaz uThaane waale nahoN to naaz karne kaa kia faaida...hahaha

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

5.
terii yaad meN kaTii to kaTii is taraH shab-e-Gham
kabhii shamm'a tilmilaaii, kabhii kaaNp kar huii kam
kabhii qatre raushnee ke vahaaN ashk ban ke Tapke
kabhii aah bhar ke roye, kabhii thaam kar jigar ham! :(

WOW ...Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooperb ..SherAli Sahib
Buhat acha likha yeh Qataa .............!

Pehla sher tu aik dam Zabardast MashaAlalh
aur muakaml ...Tu aur b acha ...!

Yaqeen maneiyay sabhi qata`at achay hein
magar last walay mein alfaz aur ehsassaat ka jo milaap hai
aik dum khoobsoorat mashaAllah!

Sahre kartay rahiyay issi se shayd sachi mein ..
mein b kuch seekh jaooN ..!

[SherAli]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

WOW ...Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooperb ..SherAli Sahib
Buhat acha likha yeh Qataa .............!

Pehla sher tu aik dam Zabardast MashaAlalh
aur muakaml ...Tu aur b acha ...!

Yaqeen maneiyay sabhi qata`at achay hein
magar last walay mein alfaz aur ehsassaat ka jo milaap hai
aik dum khoobsoorat mashaAllah!

Sahre kartay rahiyay issi se shayd sachi mein ..
mein b kuch seekh jaooN ..!

zarra-navaazii ke liye mutashakkir aur mamnoon huN...are nahiiN Gul saaHiba, maiN to bas jo zehn emN aayaa likh detaa huN aur phir yeh to aapkii suKhan fehmii hai k zarre ko aaftaab banaa diyaa...maiN ne aapko bhii paRhaa hai aur masha Allah aap bahooot achchhaa likhtii haiN...

...ham sab ek dusre se hii seekhte haiN aur hameN mavaaq'e milte haiN k ham apne kalaam ko behtar se behtar kar sakeN aur maiN ba_Khuda bahooot pasand kartaa huN agar koii mujhe merii kamiyoN aur KhaamiyoN ko bhii batlaaye...shukria k aapne apna waqt diyaa :rose

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

zarra-navaazii ke liye mutashakkir aur mamnoon huN...are nahiiN Gul saaHiba, maiN to bas jo zehn emN aayaa likh detaa huN aur phir yeh to aapkii suKhan fehmii hai k zarre ko aaftaab banaa diyaa...maiN ne aapko bhii paRhaa hai aur masha Allah aap bahooot achchhaa likhtii haiN...

...ham sab ek dusre se hii seekhte haiN aur hameN mavaaq'e milte haiN k ham apne kalaam ko behtar se behtar kar sakeN aur maiN ba_Khuda bahooot pasand kartaa huN agar koii mujhe merii kamiyoN aur KhaamiyoN ko bhii batlaaye...shukria k aapne apna waqt diyaa :rose

haan jee Bila shuba ...meri kamiyan mujhay tu nahi na dikaaein dein gee
I mean hamein hamari kami nahi dikaahi deyti ....

iss liayay Hamein dushmanoun mein rehna chahiyay :)
ta k hum apni islaah kar sakein
magar sach manein
aap k last sher ....
wazan k etebaar se aik dum Khoobsoorat hein :)

[SherAli]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

haan jee Bila shuba ...meri kamiyan mujhay tu nahi na dikaaein dein gee
I mean hamein hamari kami nahi dikaahi deyti ....

iss liayay Hamein dushmanoun mein rehna chahiyay :)
ta k hum apni islaah kar sakein
magar sach manein
aap k last sher ....
wazan k etebaar se aik dum Khoobsoorat hein :)

aapne ek kaRvi magar sach baat bahot Haseen andaaz meN kah di. yaqeenan, hameN apnii islaaH karnii chaahiye bhele vo suKhan goyii kii ho yaa iKhlaaqiyaat kii...:)

aapne farmaayaa k meraa aaKhiri band "vazan" ke aitabaar se Theek hai to ab meraa agla sawaal hai k kia digar band Khaarij-az-bahr haiN? please mujhe bataaiyegaa :) shukria :rose

[Gul]

Re: mere chand qita'aat aapke zauq kii nazar

aapne ek kaRvi magar sach baat bahot Haseen andaaz meN kah di. yaqeenan, hameN apnii islaaH karnii chaahiye bhele vo suKhan goyii kii ho yaa iKhlaaqiyaat kii...:)

aapne farmaayaa k meraa aaKhiri band "vazan" ke aitabaar se Theek hai to ab meraa agla sawaal hai k kia digar band Khaarij-az-bahr haiN? please mujhe bataaiyegaa :) shukria :rose

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