Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

[ChEeNaThEgReAt]

Assalam-o-Alekum,
aj mein apni first poem es forum per share karnay ja rahi hon........ager es mein koi ghalti ho to pehli poem samajh kar ignore kar di ga......thanx

Mere Sapnon MEin Koi Anay Laga Hai

Mere sapnon mein koi anay laga hai
Meri neendein churanay laga hai
dhadka kay mere dil ko
Mujh ko Mujhi se Churanay laga hai
Yaad ata hai woh har dum Mujhey
Najanay kiun woh Mujhey Bhulane laga hai
Woh qasmein, woh waday jo mill kar Kiye thay hum nay
Bhula kar unhein, Woh Mera dil dukhanay laga hai
Jo sapnay sajaye thay Palkon per,kar k raiza raiza un ko,
Woh Meri ankhon mein ansoo sajanay laga hai
Waqt bhi kabhi duhraye apnay ap ko,
Hum bhi kabhi yaad ayein un ko
Dil to mera bas Yahi dua Mangnay laga hai

[perfectly_created]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

adaab mohterma ~

g -- wo to paR kar pata lagg raha hai k ye sutuur bilkul ibtedaa_ii dinoN meiN likhi ga_ii hoN gi. lekin ko_ii bhi likhaari pehle hee dinn se to kamaal.e.fun ko nahi chhuu leta na? pehli seeRi par qadam beharhaal rakhna hee hota hai!

jeeti rahiyay

[Yaaram]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

jee han acha likha hay ...aapne.......Mazeed likhti raheye.....aur apni soch ko pukhta karien likhne ke muamle main........har cheez ko socha karein......Ghrayi main jaya karen........mazeed rawani aa jaye gi :0

[ChEeNaThEgReAt]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

adaab mohterma ~

g -- wo to paR kar pata lagg raha hai k ye sutuur bilkul ibtedaa_ii dinoN meiN likhi ga_ii hoN gi. lekin ko_ii bhi likhaari pehle hee dinn se to kamaal.e.fun ko nahi chhuu leta na? pehli seeRi par qadam beharhaal rakhna hee hota hai!

jeeti rahiyay

ufffffffff..........itni asan urdu ...........thodi mushkil urdu use kar layte :cc:
j/k

[ChEeNaThEgReAt]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

jee han acha likha hay ...aapne.......Mazeed likhti raheye.....aur apni soch ko pukhta karien likhne ke muamle main........har cheez ko socha karein......Ghrayi main jaya karen........mazeed rawani aa jaye gi :0

sochna dunya ka sab se mushkil tareeeeeen kaam hai jo k mein nhi kar sakti......bas jo dil mein ata hai likh dayti hon......gehrai mein jana muje nhi ata :cc:

[ghurob-e-aftab]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

BUhat khoob janab ,, buhat acha likha hai ,, keep writing :)

khush rahoo .

[muskaan]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

:) nazam tumhari achi hai khayal bhi acha hai mein sirf itna kahoongi kai thora flow par concentrate karo ....otherwise it is very well written bacha :)

khush raho :)

[La'hasil]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

hmmm acha likha hai :rose



jeeti raho khush raho sada abad raho :rose

[ChEeNaThEgReAt]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

BUhat khoob janab ,, buhat acha likha hai ,, keep writing :)

khush rahoo .

thank u :)

[ChEeNaThEgReAt]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

:) nazam tumhari achi hai khayal bhi acha hai mein sirf itna kahoongi kai thora flow par concentrate karo ....otherwise it is very well written bacha :)

khush raho :)

shukria


waise mein hameesha hi khush rahti hon ;)

[ChEeNaThEgReAt]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

hmmm acha likha hai :rose



jeeti raho khush raho sada abad raho :rose

thank u :)

[withlove]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

Pari ji ... aap ki pehli kawish nazar se guzri.. shehre-e-wafa se shuru hua safar bohat jald ajnabhi sheher ke ajnabi rasto'n tak pohancha dala... mohabbat ke aaghaz ko mohabbat ke anjaam se eik hi nazam ki chand satoor main beyaan ker dala.. goya daria ko koozay main band kerna chaha.. go ke pehli uraan .. per hoslo'n main jo uthan ... wo buland-i-parwazz ka nishaan... mohabbat ik laq-o-daq sehra hai.. iss main kahee'n nakhlistaan bhi hein aur kayee veeranay bhi.... so nazam ko thora phela lijiye... afkaar barhay ga... mashq jari rakhiye .. ke nikhar barhay ga.. yaqeenan .. aap ki doosri kawish jald hi nazar se guzray gi ... aur pichlay tajrubaat ka nichor bhi ho gi... intazar rahay ga.. abb tak ka Behad Shukria..:rose

wafa aur dua ke saath
withlove :rose

[ShAnI]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

Assalam-o-Alekum,
aj mein apni first poem es forum per share karnay ja rahi hon........ager es mein koi ghalti ho to pehli poem samajh kar ignore kar di ga......thanx

Mere Sapnon MEin Koi Anay Laga Hai

Mere sapnon mein koi anay laga hai
Meri neendein churanay laga hai
dhadka kay mere dil ko
Mujh ko Mujhi se Churanay laga hai
Yaad ata hai woh har dum Mujhey
Najanay kiun woh Mujhey Bhulane laga hai
Woh qasmein, woh waday jo mill kar Kiye thay hum nay
Bhula kar unhein, Woh Mera dil dukhanay laga hai
Jo sapnay sajaye thay Palkon per,kar k raiza raiza un ko,
Woh Meri ankhon mein ansoo sajanay laga hai
Waqt bhi kabhi duhraye apnay ap ko,
Hum bhi kabhi yaad ayein un ko
Dil to mera bas Yahi dua Mangnay laga hai

Khudaya ye kaisa zmana hai aya
Kay DADI ko poetry ka shoq honay laga hai :lol

Salamzz DADI u ki poem GUD hai pehli pehli kay hisab say dekha jayay to buhat achi hai coz flow lose nahien kiya u nay ... Ab likhti raho aur jo Frrukh Bhai (With Love) nay mshwara diya hai osper amal kero
ShAnI :rose

[WOH LARKI]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

Jo sapnay sajaye thay Palkon per,kar k raiza raiza un ko,
Woh Meri ankhon mein ansoo sajanay laga hai

CTGR8 aap ne achi koshish hey, aap boht khoob likh sakti hein bass thori see rahnumai ki zaroorat hey aap ko. Ager aap likhnay k bahd apni kawishein Mohatram QASSIM Saahb ya WITHLOVE JI ko check karwa liya karein (ager in dono ko koi ehtraz nah ho) to aap ki salahiyyatein nikher ker samnay aa sakti hein.

Umeed hey k aap yeh silsalah jari rakhein gi.inshaAllah!

[sweet_2_b_4got10]

Re: Mere Sapnon Mein Koi Anay Laga Hai

ahaaa cheeena chanda bahut hi zabardast nazam share ki hai keep sharing:clap: :clap: :phool: :phool: