*~Lerkian~*

[Aabgeena]

aik koshish ki hay..aap sab ki aa'ra ka intizar rahay ga...@};-




narm shabnami ghaas pe baitheen
batain kerteen aahain bharteen...
raat andheray chand k sang
pagal si sab lerkian...!

raat ko chhup chhup ronay waleen
gham ko hans ker sehnay waleen
phool say jazbaat liay wo..
majboor si sab lerkian...!

dil hay nazuk sheeshay jaisa
thes lagay tau khirchi khirchi
ashk bahateen, kirchiyan chunteen
nazuk si sab lerkian...!

chanchal si kuch nathkhat si kuch
meethi meethi batain kerteen
hur roop anokha saath liay wo
makhmoor si sab lerkian..!

janm liya jis pair k saey
jis chaon main khaileen,jawan hoyeen
phir choot gayee us peir ki chaon..
banjaran si sab lerkian...!

behis, beperwah si kuch
mazbooti zahir kernay waleen
andar say hain kamzor bohat
jhooti si sab lerkian...!

[Yaaram]

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wow last ki 4 lines bohat pasand aayi hain :)

[La'hasil]

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Buhat khoob Buhat hi acha likha Aabgeenay :rose


Kamal kar diya :)


buhat sara khush raho :rose

[khurram_shaikh]

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Assalaam o alekum


bahooot khoob abgeena aapka kalaam bahooot pasand aayaa her sher hi umdeh hai ek zabardast sharing per daad qabool karien aur aayindaa bhi likhti aur share kerti rahien shukriyaa khush rahien

['SamRazi']

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Buhut khoob likha hai dear :)


thnx for sharing:phool:

[Masood]

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aik koshish ki hay..aap sab ki aa'ra ka intizar rahay ga...@};-




narm shabnami ghaas pe baitheen
batain kerteen aahain bharteen...
raat andheray chand k sang
pagal si sab lerkian...!

raat ko chhup chhup ronay waleen
gham ko hans ker sehnay waleen
phool say jazbaat liay wo..
majboor si sab lerkian...!

dil hay nazuk sheeshay jaisa
thes lagay tau khirchi khirchi
ashk bahateen, kirchiyan chunteen
nazuk si sab lerkian...!

chanchal si kuch nathkhat si kuch
meethi meethi batain kerteen
hur roop anokha saath liay wo
makhmoor si sab lerkian..!

janm liya jis pair k saey
jis chaon main khaileen,jawan hoyeen
phir choot gayee us peir ki chaon..
banjaran si sab lerkian...!

behis, beperwah si kuch
mazbooti zahir kernay waleen
andar say hain kamzor bohat
jhooti si sab lerkian...!

Bohat khoobsurat! Bohat umdah aur pyarey alfaaz mein aap ney larkiyon key jazbaat ko ubhara hai. Achha laga. Khush rahiye aur likhti rahiye :)

[Z.]

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acha likha hai Aab :thmbup:

likhti rahien :-)

[WOH LARKI]

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Aabgeena sub se pehlay to aap ko PEGHAM per dil se KHUSHAMDEED kaha jata hey.
Aap ki nazm boht pasand aai, sari larkiyon k jazbat ki tarjumani karti hui iss nazm ka yeh hissa mujhey boht pasand aaya.


janm liya jis pair k saey
jis chaon main khaileen,jawan hoyeen
phir choot gayee us peir ki chaon..
banjaran si sab lerkian...!

Shukriya k sath ilteja bhi k aap aaindah bhi naye kalaam k sath aati rahiye ga.

[Muhammad Khalil]

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hummma
nice one

[Aabgeena]

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wow last ki 4 lines bohat pasand aayi hain :)

bohat shukriya...:rose

[Aabgeena]

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Buhat khoob Buhat hi acha likha Aabgeenay :rose


Kamal kar diya :)


buhat sara khush raho :rose

bohat shukirya perhnay ka...:rose

khush rahieay...:)

[WorThless]

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Asslam O Alaikum,

Bohat hee zabardast i never knew that bohat khoobsurat likha hay bachaya aur bohat sach bhi likha hai shayad ..!! par kuch kuch to jhoot bhi hey :) bohat hee sada sey ilfaz main bohat bari baatein samjhaein hain share kerney ka shukriya jeeti raho khush raho sada abad raho
Waslam

[Aabgeena]

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Assalaam o alekum


bahooot khoob abgeena aapka kalaam bahooot pasand aayaa her sher hi umdeh hai ek zabardast sharing per daad qabool karien aur aayindaa bhi likhti aur share kerti rahien shukriyaa khush rahien

bohat shukriya khurram...:rose

[Aabgeena]

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Buhut khoob likha hai dear :)


thnx for sharing:phool:

shukriya pasand kernay ka saima...:rose

[Aabgeena]

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Bohat khoobsurat! Bohat umdah aur pyarey alfaaz mein aap ney larkiyon key jazbaat ko ubhara hai. Achha laga. Khush rahiye aur likhti rahiye :)

perhnay aur pasand kernay ka shukriya...:rose