~~.alfaaz say designing ashaar post karain .~~

[z@ib]

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sawan ki hawaon ka jab shor sunoge tum
bikhrey howe mazi ke jab awraaq chunoge tum
mahol ke chehrey par jab dhool jami hogi
mehsoos tumhein har dum phir meri kami hogi
jab tum mujhe dhoondogey aankhon me nami hogi

[naveed iqbal]

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"hum"

please sher derust lekha karain
dosra mesra kuch yon hay
khak ho jain gay meger tum ko khaber honay tak

[naveed iqbal]

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shakeel bhai bahut umda
aap ka intekhab bahut acha hay
alfaz main bhi derustgi hay
qafiya o radeef ka bhi kheyal rekha gaya hay

[Gul]

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please sher derust lekha karain
dosra mesra kuch yon hay
khak ho jain gay meger tum ko khaber honay tak

sher tu aisay hee hai k
Hum nay mana k tagahaful na karo gay laikin
Khaak ho jaein gay hum tum ko khabar honay tak....

aur Naveed Sahib yehan per sher ki desiging hoti hai sab VALID AND KNOWN poets ki ...so ..
radeef qafiya b onhi ka use hota hai .....,,rest mein kia keh sakti hoon :)

[naveed iqbal]

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sher tu aisay hee hai k
Hum nay mana k tagahaful na karo gay laikin
Khaak ho jaein gay hum tum ko khabar honay tak....

aur Naveed Sahib yehan per sher ki desiging hoti hai sab VALID AND KNOWN poets ki ...so ..
radeef qafiya b onhi ka use hota hai .....,,rest mein kia keh sakti hoon :)

ful bhai ye theek hay keh redeef o qafiye beray shaeron ka hi use hota hay laken meray jesay log jis tereh is ki tang merortay hain us ka aap ko bhi andaza hona chahiye
hemaray liye to ye hi kafi hay keh ager ham khud shair nahain keh saktay to dosray shaeron kay shairon ko to sahi redeef o qafeeye say perhain ye lekhay

[amanat]

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hala g

it is not truth that some pepole are living for itself

as a example we are iving for over beloved persons

Amanat Hussain AnjumSharjah

[Gul]

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ful bhai ye theek hay keh redeef o qafiye beray shaeron ka hi use hota hay laken meray jesay log jis tereh is ki tang merortay hain us ka aap ko bhi andaza hona chahiye
hemaray liye to ye hi kafi hay keh ager ham khud shair nahain keh saktay to dosray shaeron kay shairon ko to sahi redeef o qafeeye say perhain ye lekhay

aap nay meray tu naam hee mein mistake kar de Naveed Sahib...
aur behna se bhai bana diya

mein iss baray mein ab aur kia keh sakti hoon....bass itna k ...mein nay ya kisi nay b jo sher yehan istemaal kiyay ....oss mein agar koi ghalati waqi hoi tu hum nay ek doosray ki mistake ko point out kiya..aur phir....Oss ko darust kia..
hum sher kahein ya nahi ..wo ek alag baat hai ...aur kuch nahi keh sakti mein ab :)

[Mani16]

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Maza Aagya Janab

[naveed iqbal]

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aap nay meray tu naam hee mein mistake kar de Naveed Sahib...
aur behna se bhai bana diya

mein iss baray mein ab aur kia keh sakti hoon....bass itna k ...mein nay ya kisi nay b jo sher yehan istemaal kiyay ....oss mein agar koi ghalati waqi hoi tu hum nay ek doosray ki mistake ko point out kiya..aur phir....Oss ko darust kia..
hum sher kahein ya nahi ..wo ek alag baat hai ...aur kuch nahi keh sakti mein ab :)

oh so sorry dear sister mujhay ilam nahain tha

[shakeeel]

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i Am Back

[shakeeel]

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TAQDEER

[Pehli``Barish]

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i Am Back

TAQDEER

welcome back ji :rose
bohat he khubsurat design :rose

[Gul]

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Munkir

[shakeeel]

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:rose DUSHMAN :rose

[Gul]

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DostOun