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    Hi...!!!:haey:
    i have written more than 150 poems... and of all my poems i like this one the most...
    and this is the longest i have ever written. PLEASE COMMENT.:abb:

    There was this me,
    And there was this he
    I thought of going alone
    But then I asked him to come along
    So we packed our bags and stuff
    Clothes, formal,fancy and rough
    Chocolates, cheese, nuts
    Colours, Markers, Crayons and art stuff
    I don't own a flat screen TV,
    so I packed my PSP
    And there was this and that
    A whole lot of stuff, I'd rather not mention,
    But I packed
    And I didnt forget my guitar
    I know I'd need it
    Cause we'd b away from home,too far
    Then we were completely done
    You werent sure but I told you it'd be fun
    Our ride was ready
    It had a big key
    Cause it wasnt a car, train or a plane
    It was a big rocket
    That is why all the stuff we packed had fit
    Do you remember now where we went?
    The amount we paid as rockets rent?
    Anyway our rocket blasted off
    It made heavy harsh noises as it blew off
    Everybody was sleeping,they didnt notice
    And to be careful, I pressed the button saying "shh..."
    And it took us seven years to reach saturn
    And in the way we had so much fun
    We saw stars,moon and sun
    We saw planets and milky way
    There was no night, no day
    together we played
    We sang happy songs
    Nothing went wrong
    Then we landed on saturn
    We found liquid methane
    We had to take it back home
    We had space in our ride,few rooms
    So we filled them to the top
    And home,earth was our next stop
    And it took us seven years to go home
    We were tired but never felt alone
    Bit bored but we still had fun and each other we adored
    Then back home we were,
    stretching legs and yawning
    It was almost morning
    Quickly into our homes, into our beds
    You there, Me here
    And the money we got from selling liquid methane,
    we never could share
    Cause somebody stole our rocket
    The keys werent safe,they didnt fit your pocket
    You lost your memory,you dont have a clue
    About anything that we went through
    But if you just look in your pocket
    You will see a manual with a map
    Picture we took of a star
    That may give you an idea
    How close we are,yet so far...
    Last edited by Strawberry; 25 November 2009, 13:38.

  • #2
    Re: Magical trip to saturn

    Ahan :D:

    Super na shandar

    Great thinking :thmbup:

    Awesome :rose

    but......... Give me ur PSP pleeeeeeeej

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    • #3
      Re: Magical trip to saturn

      it was really good. i liked it alot.
      keep writting and keep sharing your all poetries with us
      be happy .
      u can't gain RESPECT by choice nor by requesting it... it is earned through your words & actions."

      :pr:

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      • #4
        Re: Magical trip to saturn

        Originally posted by kutkutariyaan View Post
        Ahan :D:

        Super na shandar

        Great thinking :thmbup:

        Awesome :rose

        but......... Give me ur PSP pleeeeeeeej
        Thanks:tunn:

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        • #5
          Re: Magical trip to saturn

          Originally posted by *Hala* View Post
          it was really good. i liked it alot.
          keep writting and keep sharing your all poetries with us
          be happy .
          Thankuuu

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          • #6
            Re: Magical trip to saturn

            Originally posted by Strawberry View Post
            Hi...!!!:haey:
            i have written more than 150 poems... and of all my poems i like this one the most...
            and this is the longest i have ever written. PLEASE COMMENT.:abb:

            There was this me,
            And there was this he
            I thought of going alone
            But then I asked him to come along
            So we packed our bags and stuff
            Clothes, formal,fancy and rough
            Chocolates, cheese, nuts
            Colours, Markers, Crayons and art stuff
            I don't own a flat screen TV,
            so I packed my PSP
            And there was this and that
            A whole lot of stuff, I'd rather not mention,
            But I packed
            And I didnt forget my guitar
            I know I'd need it
            Cause we'd b away from home,too far
            Then we were completely done
            You werent sure but I told you it'd be fun
            Our ride was ready
            It had a big key
            Cause it wasnt a car, train or a plane
            It was a big rocket
            That is why all the stuff we packed had fit
            Do you remember now where we went?
            The amount we paid as rockets rent?
            Anyway our rocket blasted off
            It made heavy harsh noises as it blew off
            Everybody was sleeping,they didnt notice
            And to be careful, I pressed the button saying "shh..."
            And it took us seven years to reach saturn
            And in the way we had so much fun
            We saw stars,moon and sun
            We saw planets and milky way
            There was no night, no day (That's wonderful)

            together we played
            We sang happy songs
            Nothing went wrong
            Then we landed on saturn
            We found liquid methane
            We had to take it back home
            (What an idea
            :lol)
            We had space in our ride,few rooms
            So we filled them to the top
            And home,earth was our next stop
            And it took us seven years to go home
            We were tired but never felt alone
            Bit bored but we still had fun and each other we adored
            Then back home we were,
            stretching legs and yawning
            It was almost morning
            Quickly into our homes, into our beds (on)
            You there, Me here
            And the money we sold from selling liquid methane,
            we never could share
            Cause somebody stole our rocket
            The keys werent safe,they didnt fit your pocket
            You lost your memory,you dont have a clue
            About anything that we went through
            But if you just look in your pocket
            You will see a manual with a map
            Picture we took of a star
            That may give you an idea
            How close we are,yet so far...
            You got imagination and more than that a real talent to encapsulate your fantasy in memorable piece of art. My Congratulation to you :rose
            :thmbup:

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            • #7
              Re: Magical trip to saturn

              Originally posted by munda_sialkoty View Post
              You got imagination and more than that a real talent to encapsulate your fantasy in memorable piece of art. My Congratulation to you :rose
              thanks...:haey:
              btw... it is into... not on.. least thats what i know:think:
              i found out that there is liquid methane found on satrun... thats where the whole inspiration came from...

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              • #8
                Re: Magical trip to saturn

                Originally posted by Strawberry View Post
                thanks...:haey:
                btw... it is into... not on.. least thats what i know:think:
                i found out that there is liquid methane found on satrun... thats where the whole inspiration came from...
                According to my information "into" demonstrates that one thing is entering another while if you are supposed to place yourself on the bed, then "on" is the appropriate word for this. Just like you can enter from Corridor "into" room, you can pour water from Jug "into" a glass but you can't place yourself "into" bed as you are supposed to place yourself on the surface of bed.

                Anyhow I really liked the idea of collecting "Methane" from Saturn surface and to bring it to earth in order to compensate the travel expenses. Wise idea :khi:
                :thmbup:

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                • #9
                  Re: Magical trip to saturn

                  its "into"...... :tunn:

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                  • #10
                    Re: Magical trip to saturn

                    and i skipped the word "got" ..... the money we got from selling liquid methane....
                    oopsey daisey... my bad

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                    • #11
                      Re: Magical trip to saturn

                      into as in... quilt and bed... u get into bed...

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                      • #12
                        Re: Magical trip to saturn

                        Originally posted by Strawberry View Post
                        into as in... quilt and bed... u get into bed...

                        Due to spring mattress and quilt, your bed will be more springy and flexible. Ok no problem :khi:
                        :thmbup:

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                        • #13
                          Re: Magical trip to saturn

                          Originally posted by Strawberry View Post
                          and i skipped the word "got" ..... the money we got from selling liquid methane....
                          oopsey daisey... my bad
                          Yes you bad














                          as you lost your wallet today :lol
                          :thmbup:

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                          • #14
                            Re: Magical trip to saturn

                            hehehe

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                            • #15
                              Re: Magical trip to saturn

                              Assalaam-O-Alaikum Strawberry

                              Welcome to English Corner and yeah welcome back to earth :lol

                              It was wonderful reading your lovely piece of art and seeing your inspiration turnning into this wonderful poem where you have truly expressed your feelings with very correct selection of easy to understand words.

                              I wish to see more poems from your end, keep sharing and making us smile with your light words :) Khush rahyeh
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