Change...!! an action

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

Assalam-o-Alaykum Dear PG friends,,!! :phool:
This is a short story from me...:)..i am responsible for the content written in the story..thanks for reading it..:)

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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A good maiden attempt, but a couple of spelling mistakes were there like "help" "insane" "damn"

One sentence is not complete, let me complete it with appropriate words.

"Can you spend only five minutes for those (who are) bearing the consequences of an imposed war".

Another thing, the theme was not clear enough as it should have to be. Why that person was emphasizing to change the world, makes no sense as we read till end. What the professor was urging, is another slip up. His concept were also not clear and well directed.

Don't worry brother I am also not that good, but we should strive to bring about perfection. The theme should be clear, and it is important. Anyhow, you became the first drop of rain who shared "your own written story".

You deserve much more appreciation than others. Be blessed.

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

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A good maiden attempt, but a couple of spelling mistakes were there like "help" "insane" "damn"

maiden at pg...:D...these are proof reading mistakes...:D..also my keyboard:lahoul

One sentence is not complete, let me complete it with appropriate words.

"Can you spend only five minutes for those (who are) bearing the consequences of an imposed war".

yeah ..it is okay in both cases...thanks for completing it...:)

Another thing, the theme was not clear enough as it should have to be. Why that person was emphasizing to change the world, makes no sense as we read till end. What the professor was urging, is another slip up. His concept were also not clear and well directed.

sometimes writer makes an approach for the readers to understand the theme by themselves..and in many cases the purpose of writing is only served by doing this....!!getting the theme...going to the right direction..making connections...this is how you get to the background...:)
anyways thanks for your deep analysis..:)

Don't worry brother I am also not that good, but we should strive to bring about perfection. The theme should be clear, and it is important. Anyhow, you became the first drop of rain who shared "your own written story".

You deserve much more appreciation than others. Be blessed.

:D..i am not worried at all...:dance2:...but to get readers interest and to open the locks of minds writer has to play this kind of "hide and seek"
once again thanks a lot for paying attention:phool:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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maiden at pg...:D...these are proof reading mistakes...:D..also my keyboard:lahoul


yeah ..it is okay in both cases...thanks for completing it...:)


sometimes writer makes an approach for the readers to understand the theme by themselves..and in many cases the purpose of writing is only served by doing this....!!getting the theme...going to the right direction..making connections...this is how you get to the background...:)
anyways thanks for your deep analysis..:)


:D..i am not worried at all...:dance2:...but to get readers interest and to open the locks of minds writer has to play this kind of "hide and seek"
once again thanks a lot for paying attention:phool:

Since I am not authority and my views reflect my own approach and everyone has his/her own style and thinking which is essential for diversity. You keep on sharing and I will join your hands :thmbup:

[Pakiza]

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as interesting piece of writing i should say
a whole too much of emotion shown in very few words which was not doing justice
any ways as Munda uncle said too much mix up but its a good concept
I liked what the professor was saying
keep it up nice work

[pakgates]

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Walaikum asalam,

excellent man, lekin mein aik baat par yaqeen rakhta hoon, keh agar aap apni soch badlein too aap ki zindagi badal sakti hay aur agar aap apni zindagi badleingay too aap kay ird grd ka mauhol khud badal giay ga

[*Hala*]

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well written

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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as interesting piece of writing i should say
a whole too much of emotion shown in very few words which was not doing justice
any ways as Munda uncle said too much mix up but its a good concept
I liked what the professor was saying
keep it up nice work

Shuker he tum ne tehrer to perhi, warna Hala ki tarah larkiyan bagair perhay Nice Sharing aur Well Written likh ke baag jati hein 372-haha

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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Walaikum asalam,

excellent man, lekin mein aik baat par yaqeen rakhta hoon, keh agar aap apni soch badlein too aap ki zindagi badal sakti hay aur agar aap apni zindagi badleingay too aap kay ird grd ka mauhol khud badal giay ga

kia mein isay quote of the day ka khitaab de doon :phool:

[pakgates]

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kia mein isay quote of the day ka khitaab de doon :phool:

iss karam nawazi ka shukriya janaab :salam:

[saraah]

Re: Change...!! an action

Walaikum asalam,

excellent man, lekin mein aik baat par yaqeen rakhta hoon, keh agar aap apni soch badlein too aap ki zindagi badal sakti hay aur agar aap apni zindagi badleingay too aap kay ird grd ka mauhol khud badal giay ga

kia mein isay quote of the day ka khitaab de doon :phool:

aur me b:thmbup:

[Pakiza]

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Shuker he tum ne tehrer to perhi, warna Hala ki tarah larkiyan bagair perhay Nice Sharing aur Well Written likh ke baag jati hein 372-haha

:khi:

[pakgates]

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aur me b:thmbup:

:rose

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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iss karam nawazi ka shukriya janaab :salam:

:thmbup:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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aur me b:thmbup:

Nahi hum dono he :embarasse