Wanna die in your arms

[musaddaq]

I believed in fairies & cute cinderellas
And I dreamt of an everlasting smile
I danced in moonlight & sang under the stars
As the time flew away like an owl

Love was a flame which lights for ever
But storms could always interrupt
Two hearts were burning ; So painful it was
The tragedy of a suffocated love

A scar was left in the bottom of my heart
A wound that would never be cured
I struggled to breathe But the lungs were stucked
Your fragrance was missing in the air

The death is so cold as it meant to be
But I learnt to love that eternal emptiness
When I'll shed my last breath wanna be in your arms
And feel your tendre touch in my deathbed

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

I believed in fairies & cute cinderellas

And I dreamt of an everlasting smile
I danced in moonlight & sang under the stars
As the time flew away like an owl

Love was a flame which lights for ever
But storms could always interrupt
Two hearts were burning ; So painful it was
The tragedy of a suffocated love

A scar was left in the bottom of my heart
A wound that would never be cured
I struggled to breathe But the lungs were stucked
Your fragrance was missing in the air

The death is so cold as it meant to be
But I learnt to love that eternal emptiness
When I'll shed my last breath wanna be in your arms

And feel your tendre (Tender) touch in my deathbed

I would categorize this poem imbalanced with immature and random thoughts. Yet it failed to convey a proper sense for what is this poem all about OR what theme it was up to convey. Started with fairies and cinderella it ended up in the lap of a third body - totally unjust with the peom :na: The way you are portraying the tragic death is another flaw and hilarious as well :khi:What is this Nikameya :donno:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

kahan gaib ho gaya he :blush:

[musaddaq]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

I would categorize this poem imbalanced with immature and random thoughts. Yet it failed to convey a proper sense for what is this poem all about OR what theme it was up to convey. Started with fairies and cinderella it ended up in the lap of a third body - totally unjust with the peom :na: The way you are portraying the tragic death is another flaw and hilarious as well :khi:What is this Nikameya :donno:

:donno:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

:donno:

You should have applogized in front of public

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

Nice..

[Aarzo]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

wow nice sharing

[baqarkashmiri]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

Very good

[musaddaq]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

You should have applogized in front of public

I am apologized to all forum for his (Bhalu's) all kind of acts he does, ab to theek hai na aamir:slap:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

Re: Wanna die in your arms

I am apologized to all forum for his (Bhalu's) all kind of acts he does, ab to theek hai na aamir:slap:

But i am not to blame in this peom :donno: So you should accept the responsibility by urself :na: