Oljhan ka nataa

[Gul]

Oljhan ka nataa

[zmufti]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

buhat khoob
Huma jee is khoobsurat nazm ke liye daad qabool kijye

[Masood]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Zabardast Gul again and again - har baar aik achhey kalaam key saath aati ho - khush raho

[Gul]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Thanx Alot Zarqa jee :)

[Gul]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Zabardast Gul again and again - har baar aik achhey kalaam key saath aati ho - khush raho

Thanx Masood Jee ..Comments k liyay ..!Khush rahiyay

[shahid_naman]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

bahot zaber dast huma be

[T@nh@ Mus@fir]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

iss nazam main aap ney apney alfaaz ko iss khubsurati say aik larri main piroya hai k her khatam honey wali line ka agali line k sath aik rishta hai, naata hai aap ney likha tu aik oljhan k barey main lakin apney lafzon ko kabhi bhi oljhaney nahi diya. or yeahi aik khubsurat poet ki nishaani hoti hai.

Gul ji aap kesey likh leti hain itna khubsurat kalaam. mujhe pata nahi kion aapki poetry itni achi lagti hai. shayed aap k alfaaz main mujhe apni he dhundhali dhundhali see tasveer dikhayee deti hai.

aik dafa phir buhat he khubsurat kawish

[Gul]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Yeh nazam mujhay khud b buhat pasand hai ....!
Buhat shukriya ....! Usman Sahib

[*Hijab*]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

v nice

[Mani16]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Kia kehne gul sis umdaa se bhi umda

[*Hala*]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

buht khubsurat lekhi hai ... khush rahein

[Tanha Hassan]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

kamal hai wa wa

[kutkutariyaan]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Nice :)

But Text Effect dete hoe shaid jaldi ki gaee hain thinkingg

[crystal_thinking]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

very very very nice wording.... bhot khoob image perfect lag ra hy... ALLAH BLESS U....

[thefire1]

Re: Oljhan ka nataa

Wah Kia baat hay Gul Jee, bohat hi khoosburat nazm likhi hay aap nay, kitni khoobsurti say apnay dili ehsaasaat, khuwahishaat ko itnay sehal lafzoon kay labaday main lapait kar iss screen per bikhair diya... kitni sachayi hay inn lafzoon main aur kitni masoofiyat hay inn ehsaasaat main... aaj iss nazm ko likhay taqreeban 2 saal ho chukay hain, pata nahin ab dil ka ehsaas kaisa hay, kia abhi bhi jazboon main waisi hi garmaish hay kay waqt ki barf nay saaray ehsaasat ko thanda kar dia hay.... mujhay tou aisa hi lagta hay kay guzarta hua lamha insaan ko MATURE bana daita hay aur woh aihista ahista waqt kay saath samjhouta karna seekh laita hay, yeh sab ehsaas srif maazi ka hissa reh jaatay hain, kabhi yaad ki shakal main, tou kabhi zakhm ki shakal main aur kabhi yehi zakham meraas ban jaatay hain aur hum say kuch log inn meraas main milay zakhmoon ko hara rakhtay hain apnay liye jeenay ka sahara bana kar!!!

main phir shuroo hogaya:lol

Oljhan ka nataa