Ao Dekho .................................

[*Hala*]

Asalam o Alikum WR WB
hope sab khairat sy hogi.
pg ki Alaa shoraa ki poetry ki fan ho ...to onki shairy pher kar mujhy be yeah shoq howa....ka mein be lekho... :shyy:
aur first time apni ek nacheez lekhi ho qalam app sab ki sath share karni ja rahi ho....

iss poetry ki ISLAH (correction) WASI ANJUM ni kia hai... so me thankful to him.

[S.Athar]

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:salam: V.V Nice App Jis Tarha Designing Main Rang Bakhyrti Hain Omed hay Oushi Tarha Poetry KO Bhe nay rang Dayingi Wish you good luck :rose

[*Hala*]

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buht shukria apka .... INSHALLAH i try ma best.

[WASI ANJUM]

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Sab se pehle Welcome to Nai shoraa mein

Bahot khoob Hala zabrdast likha hai
pehle k halat aur aur ab ka manzar pesh kiya hai aap ne is poem mein
bahot khoobsurat aagaz kiya hai aap ne ummid hai k ye silsila jari rakhen gi

[Z.]

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wah! deyr khaqwaley :rose

[MeemSheenAlif]

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Walaikum Assalam

too gud

[*Hala*]

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Sab se pehle Welcome to Nai shoraa mein

Bahot khoob Hala zabrdast likha hai
pehle k halat aur aur ab ka manzar pesh kiya hai aap ne is poem mein
bahot khoobsurat aagaz kiya hai aap ne ummid hai k ye silsila jari rakhen gi

shukria
buht shukria hosila afazai aur pasand karni ki lye

wah! deyr khaqwaley

deer manana grani khory

Walaikum Assalam

too gud

thanko alot

[Tamana]

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Hala ta kala rai sy da shiary shoro kari da :hug:

[*Rida*]

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Asalam o Alikum WR WB
hope sab khairat sy hogi.
pg ki Alaa shoraa ki poetry ki fan ho ...to onki shairy pher kar mujhy be yeah shoq howa....ka mein be lekho... :shyy:
aur first time apni ek nacheez lekhi ho qalam app sab ki sath share karni ja rahi ho....

iss poetry ki ISLAH (correction) WASI ANJUM ni kia hai... so me thankful to him.

:O:
Walaikom Assalam WR WB
:wow: Hala.......:super:

kia kehnay .... yani aap kay mazeed kalaam kay bhi ham muntazir rehain .....
acha likha hai ...

[Mahvish Waqas]

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Assalam o alaikum wr wb...

Bohat hi umdah likha hai aap ne....
Designing main tou aap hamesha hi zabardast hain..
Aap kay naye kalam ka intizar rahay ga..
Khush rahain

[Nadia khan]

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Walikum Assalam
wow bahut hi nice designing hen
aur aap ne bahut hi umda likha hai
sada khush rahen:phool::rose

[thefire1]

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Walaikum Assalaam

Shayeri ka maqsad apnay haalat-e-zindagi ko lafzoon kay libaaday main samait kar auroon ki nazar karna hota hay aap nay yeh kaam bakhoobi nibhaaya hay, lagta nahi kay yeh aap ki pehli Ghazal hay, kiyonki soch ki itni pukhtagi aur sahi lafzoon ka istimaal itna asaan nahin hota, magar aap nay inn sab ko bohat asaan bana dia, Wasi sahab nay yaqeenan bohat khoobsurat andaaz say TASHEEH ki hay aap ki.... Bohat khoob, likhti rahyeh aap ki shayeri main moujood aik KHUWAHISH, aik HASRAT hum sab say chuppi nahin rahi hay :)

Khush rahyeh.

Fi Amaan ALLAH

[*Hala*]

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Walaikum Assalaam

Shayeri ka maqsad apnay haalat-e-zindagi ko lafzoon kay libaaday main samait kar auroon ki nazar karna hota hay aap nay yeh kaam bakhoobi nibhaaya hay, lagta nahi kay yeh aap ki pehli Ghazal hay, kiyonki soch ki itni pukhtagi aur sahi lafzoon ka istimaal itna asaan nahin hota, magar aap nay inn sab ko bohat asaan bana dia, Wasi sahab nay yaqeenan bohat khoobsurat andaaz say TASHEEH ki hay aap ki.... Bohat khoob, likhti rahyeh aap ki shayeri main moujood aik KHUWAHISH, aik HASRAT hum sab say chuppi nahin rahi hay

Khush rahyeh.
Fi Amaan ALLAH

buht shukria Ali ji... hosila afzai or pasand karni ki lyee......

Walikum Assalam
wow bahut hi nice designing hen
aur aap ne bahut hi umda likha hai
sada khush rahen

buht shukria dearo Nadia khan.....

Assalam o alaikum wr wb...

Bohat hi umdah likha hai aap ne....
Designing main tou aap hamesha hi zabardast hain..
Aap kay naye kalam ka intizar rahay ga..
Khush rahain

thankz dear sis.... bas koshish thi..... hope apki tarah achi lekh sakto

Walaikom Assalam WR WB
Hala.......

kia kehnay .... yani aap kay mazeed kalaam kay bhi ham muntazir rehain .....
acha likha hai ...

sach u ko pasand agyee......
dekhti hai... ka kia hotaa... ;)

[*Hala*]

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Hala ta kala rai sy da shiary shoro kari da

manana garani ... sta da judai la ghama mein lekhali de... :hug:

[Mr. Sialkoty]

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Dear Hala,

I appreciate your maiden flight, but I want you to be more focused on the positive aspects of life as life is a biggest blessing of Almighty Allah.

Put in more effort and you will improve a lot and one day you will shine like a star. May God bless you.