2/4 ash'haar

[WOH LARKI]

aik namukammal nazm k chand shehr.....


yaadein hein k dil mein samandar biphray huye
aansu hein k aankhon mein darya utray huye

kirchi kirchi samaituoonn kaisay!zakhmi hon gi ungliyan
har soo meri zzat k hein tukrray bikhray huye

suna rahay hein bachon ki,bhook ki kahani
chehray pe hasratein aur haath phailay huye

so gai thi ghairat kahan meray muhafiz bhaiyon ki!
sar e bazaar meri maon k kiyun daaman mailay huye

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By Muskan

[Bheegi-Palkain]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

Asslam-o_Alikum WR WB

Ab kya kho is per ! ...... aap ka aik aik shair main drd hi drd hay wo bhi . dosro ky liya ...

FeaamnAllah

[WOH LARKI]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

Asslam-o_Alikum WR WB

Ab kya kho is per ! ...... aap ka aik aik shair main drd hi drd hay wo bhi . dosro ky liya ...

FeaamnAllah

Ab kia kahoon iss per!.........har waqt tareef achi nhi hoti....aur dard to jo mehsoos karay wohi samjh skta hey na!

[Hassan]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

last shair pr tu mery rongty khryy ho gaey hain....kasi dukh bhari bat kah di hay aap ne
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[WOH LARKI]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

last shair pr tu mery rongty khryy ho gaey hain....kasi dukh bhari bat kah di hay aap ne
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Hasan aap ka be hadd shukriya k aap ne in ash'har ko parha aur dard ko mehsoos bhi kiya jo mojooda halaat ka pedakerdah hey.

[hayaa_n]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

Muskan Ji baihad pur-soz kalaam hay.har shair hi pur asar hay.:masha

[WOH LARKI]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

Muskan Ji baihad pur-soz kalaam hay.har shair hi pur asar hay.:masha

Hayya ji....aap k yeh alfaz parh ker mein samjhti hoon k mein ne jo pegham dena chaha wo logon tak pohnch raha hey.
boht shukriya:rose

[shahid_naman]

Re: 2/4 ash'haar

aik namukammal nazm k chand shehr.....


yaadein hein k dil mein samandar biphray huye
aansu hein k aankhon mein darya utray huye

kirchi kirchi samaituoonn kaisay!zakhmi hon gi ungliyan
har soo meri zzat k hein tukrray bikhray huye

suna rahay hein bachon ki,bhook ki kahani
chehray pe hasratein aur haath phailay huye

so gai thi ghairat kahan meray muhafiz bhaiyon ki!
sar e bazaar meri maon k kiyun daaman mailay huye

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By Muskan

app na jo lekha ha likha to acha ha alkin bahot takleef da lekha ha
but very nice