**Dil ki baat**

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

Dil ki baat thi so jasay Dil mai aai..keh di..:blush:

[WASI ANJUM]

Re: **Dil ki baat**

Waah sher Ali sahib
bahoot zabardast likha hai aap ne

[aabi2cool]

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bohaty ummda zabar10 bohat khoob ...is lehaz se ye achi koshish hy k aap baqaeda is fun k mahir naheen hain hy phir bhi koshish ki so great..,.

[Yaaram]

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bohat khoob - ash'aar main be wazni to payi jati hay - lekan soch bohat khoob hay -

[Shakh-e-Tamana]

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acha likha hai sher ali ji..



but me kehna chahon gi keh ap nay start main sawal ki baat ki hai na or ap nay 2nd shair main sawaal he kiya hai...Teri ankhon k seeshaon main kio khud ko talaash kerta hoon....

tu ager baqiyon main b sawal kerta means kio ka azaafa kertay tu..wo ik tarteeb rehti...kaya khayal hai ap ka?


waisay achi try hai ap ki...sada say alfaz buhat achay lhikay hain ap nay...

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

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Waah sher Ali sahib
bahoot zabardast likha hai aap ne

Thank u Wasi Bro..:rose

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

Re: **Dil ki baat**

bohaty ummda zabar10 bohat khoob ...is lehaz se ye achi koshish hy k aap baqaeda is fun k mahir naheen hain hy phir bhi koshish ki so great..,.

jee pasand kernay ka buhat buhat shukria..:rose

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

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bohat khoob - ash'aar main be wazni to payi jati hay - lekan soch bohat khoob hay -

Major pasand kernay ka buhat buhat shukriya...:rose..jahan tak baat ha bay wazni ki to tumhain tu pata ha kay main koi regular poetry nahi kerta..kabhi kabhaar dil main kuch alfaaz ka majmooa banta ha tu ...likh layta hoon:)

[Capt.Abdur Rehman]

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acha likha hai sher ali ji..



but me kehna chahon gi keh ap nay start main sawal ki baat ki hai na or ap nay 2nd shair main sawaal he kiya hai...Teri ankhon k seeshaon main kio khud ko talaash kerta hoon....

tu ager baqiyon main b sawal kerta means kio ka azaafa kertay tu..wo ik tarteeb rehti...kaya khayal hai ap ka?


waisay achi try hai ap ki...sada say alfaz buhat achay lhikay hain ap nay...

Shakh jee pasand kernay ka buhat buhat shuhkria:rose
main ahista ahista seekh raha hoon kay alfaz ki terteeb kasi honi chaiay...inshAllah i wil work on it..:)

[raafi]

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Wow, that's really wonderful sharing......................... :)

[Shakh-e-Tamana]

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Shakh jee pasand kernay ka buhat buhat shuhkria:rose
main ahista ahista seekh raha hoon kay alfaz ki terteeb kasi honi chaiay...inshAllah i wil work on it..:)

V Good:rose


Nonnay bachay ho u:comfort:

[uzair143]

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nice
uzair

[refreshing_breeze]

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khubsoorat dil ki baat hai :rose

[farahan]

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Bohat hi accha likha aap nai