ufaq k uss paar

[WOH LARKI]

SAMAJH LENA......

Thaka hua zard aaftab
soona aasman
pheekay shafq rung
chup chaap istaada ashjaar
aisay hi wehshatnaak sannatay mein
bain kerti sarsraati hawa mein
kisi tunha punchhi ko urrta dekh ker
samajh lena k uffaq k uss paar
kisi ki bheegti barsti aankhon
aur sulagti sochon mein
kitni hi hasratein maatam kunaan hein
jo ab tumhari lahu rang aankhon mein
chupkay se utar aai hein....


By Muskan

[Masood]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

[FONT=Trebuchet MS]Muskan bohat pyari nazam kahi hai aap ney bohat achhai lagi aur yaqin ho geya hai keh aap ki shairana soch bhi bohat aala hai. :rose

[WOH LARKI]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

Ji bohttttttttt shukriya( aik aap hi hein jo tootay phootay lafzon ko shayeri samjhtay hein aur bardasht kartay hein:lol )

[Yaaram]

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hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm aap azad likhti hain bohat zabardast
main zyada tarr azad likha hua pasand karta hoon bohat bohat shukrya share karne ka
kya yaad bhai nazm kahi hai zabardast :)

[khurram_shaikh]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

Assalaam o alekum,


Waaah bahoot khoob bahoot hi zabardast likhaa aapnien muskan dili daad qabool karien shukriya humse share kernien kaa khush rahien

[WOH LARKI]

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Khurram bhai aap ki DILLI daad hum ne qabool ki:D aap ka bhi bohht hi shukriya k nazm aap ko pasand aai.

[Brijinder]

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Muskan,
I am still awaiting for the roman versions of few of ur poems.
Brijinder

[WOH LARKI]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

Muskan,
I am still awaiting for the roman versions of few of ur poems.
Brijinder

Brijinder ji,

Aap iss poem ko ab roman mein parh sktay hein mein ne edit ker di hey roman k sath.

Aap ka tah e dil se shukriya ada kerti hun aur aap ko intezaar ki zehmat uthana parri uss k liye maazrat.:rose

[Brijinder]

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Muskaan,
You are on te right path.Ur poems are different.I don't much care for the poems which totally adhere to all the fixed parameters of urdu poetry n yet are devoid of soul.I call these pretty mummies.It does not mean that i dont love poems which are not azad,I have far too deep love for many of the poets sticking to that form too.But dear,I dont much care for just a pretty arrangement of words.
Keep writing n KEEP READING urdu poetry and world litrature as well.If possible go beyond,litrataure to philosophy,psychology,history and develpoment of of scince n other subjects.Recently i finished a very beautiful book on scince by Bill bryson called "A Ashrt History of Almost Everything"Do read if u can.
All my best to you in ur journey.
Brijinder

[hayaa_n]

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Muskan ji aap ki likhi yeh nazm bhi bouhat pasand aai.:masha :)

[WOH LARKI]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

Muskan ji aap ki likhi yeh nazm bhi bouhat pasand aai.:masha :)

Hayya ji iss qadar pazeerai k liye aap ka behadd o hisab shukriya ada kerti hun.:rose

[zmufti]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

buhat khoob
Muskaan jee nazm ke liye daad qabool kijye
khush rahiye
zmufti

[phototech81]

Re: ufaq k uss paar

nice janab wa ji wa
bohat hi khub keya hi peyara andaz hai
nazam lekhny ka
nice janab bahot khub

[sohailmalik64]

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Muskan
bohat khubsurat wazeh aur puasar nazam kehi hay aap naiN

regards
sohail malik

[shahid_naman]

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hmmmm.....
wha muskan ge bahot acha lekha ha app na..