~~Bait Baazi~~

[ahsaas]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

aik pal ko thehar ja gham-e-do jahan
mashwra chahti hai jawani meri
sang dil doston key haseen shehar mein
kaam aai bohat sakht jaani meri

ye din to qayaamat kii tarah guzaraa hai
jaane kyaa baat thii har baat pe ronaa aayaa

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Udher woh shor keh seel-e-fana hai zoron per
idher yeh haal keh deewar-o-dar mein khaak nahin

[ahsaas]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

merey kafan ki siyahi daleel hai iski
merey siwa mera pur'sa kisi ney bhi na diya
shabo ki raakh mein yun gum huwa wajood mera
mera suragh meri roshni ney bhi na diya

[ahsaas]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Abdeeda aankh meri tab sa hay
Dil mera uss ka sehar main jab sa hay
Attesh-e-khamosh abb senay main ha
Dard-e-dil jab sa jura her shub sa hay

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Yeh aks-e-daagh shakist-e-paiman woh rang-e-zakhm khaloos-e-yaraan
main ghamgusaron mein sochta hoon keh baat chherron kahan kahan sey?

[*khushi*]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

yun kab tak daher se chup kar milienge hum andhere mei
kisi shab wo mere ghar mei ali alaan reh jaye
chalo mei khud ko aj khanjar k hawale karti hoon
meri jaan jaye to jaye....tumhara maaan rteh jaYE...

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Yeh shairi yeh kitabein yeh aayatein dil ki
nishaniyan yeh sabhi tujh peh warna hon gi

[*khushi*]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Inhi patharoon pe chal ker ager aa sako tu aao,
Maire ghar ke raste mein koi gulistan nahi hai...

[crying eyes]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Ashk anmool hain kho na dena kahin,
In ki har boond hai motiyoon se haseen..

next lafz hai *noon*

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Inhi patharoon pe chal ker ager aa sako tu aao,
Maire ghar ke raste mein koi gulistan nahi hai...

Is shair mein kuchh problem hai... mera khiyal hai keh sahih shair kuchh yun hai:

inhi pathron peh chal key agar aa sako to aao
merey ghar key rastey mein koi kehkashan nahin

Ashk anmool hain kho na dena kahin,
In ki har boond hai motiyoon se haseen..

next lafz hai *noon*

Crying Eyes ham aap ko Pegham Baitbazi mein teh-e-dil sey welcome kartey hain, magar aap ka shair asool key khilaf hai - aap ka shair us harf sey shuru hona chahiyey jis per last wala shair khatam huwa hai :)

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Yeh misaiil-e-tasawwuf, yeh tera biyaan Ghalib
tujhey ham wali samajhtey jo na badah'khawar hota

[ahsaas]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Abhi na chair muhabbat ke geet aey mutrib
abhi hayat ka mahool khushgawar nahi

[Masood]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

:)

[ahsaas]

Re: ~~Bait Baazi~~

Ye na poochho ke thi ehsaas ki shiddat kaisi
Dhop aisi thi ke saey ko bhi jalte dekha