Naqab Cherey!

[*Hijab*]

Assalamo-Alekam, ummid kerti hoon ke aap sab kheriyat say hon gey.
Yeh meri naye Tehreer hai, well hai tou bohat purani lekin aap logon ke saath share abhi ker rahi hoon. Basically, yeh meri sab say Pehli Tehreer hai, jis din mein ne aisey he socha tha ke let's write something, tou us din mein ne yeh likhi thi. Meri pehli dou Tehreerein, "Zameer Ki Awaz" aur "Zindagi...Aik Tehreer", woh dono mein ne is Tehreer ke baad likhi thi.
I hope you will read it and give your valuable comments! Khush Rahiye:)

[Mind hackeR]

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w/salaam...!!!
hmm...!!!
sadia ap ne acha likha hai go k aap ne bata diya k yeh aap ki sab se pehli kawish hai lekin phir bhi perh ker mehsoos hua k kafi pukhtagi hai aap ki tehreer mai aur khaas tor per jis aham aur hassas masley ko aap ne chuna apni tehreer k liye uss ki zaroorat k mutabiq kisi hud tak aap apni tehreer k saath insaaf ker pai hain...!!!
khush rahen... :)

[*Hijab*]

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aap ke comments ka bohat shukriya Mind Hacker, INSHALLAH koshish karoon gi ke apni writing ko improve ker sako, once again thanx for reading and giving your precious comments:)

[Yaaram]

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ahaN - bohat umdah tehreer likhi hay aap ne Sadia Likhti rahye - ALLAH aap ke qalam main taqat peda kare Amin

[*Hijab*]

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thanx for liking Yaaram bhai! aap ke Dua ke liye bohat bohat shukriya:)

[raafi]

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meinay bhi aap ki yeh sharing first time parhi hai.... khooobsurat sharing hai..... keep it up

[Hitler]

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buht chi tehreeer hai ......aaj kal tu aisa hi haal hai her jaga..

[Pakiza]

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bahut achi tehreer hai Sadia

Khuda app ko aur sach likheny ki taaqat de

[Pehli``Barish]

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sadia aap nay itni achi kahani likhi hay k main jitni tareeef karon wo kam hay, achi manzar kashi ki hay or kahani main jo pegham aap nay diya hay wo bohat naseehat aamooz hay, aap boht achi likhnay wali hain is liye choti si, nanhi munni si tanqeed krnay ki jasaarat kar rahi hon :eye:
aap aik chonka daynay walay anjaam ki tarf kahani ko boht khoobsorti say lay kar to gae hain magar anjaam ka kahani say talluq kuch mazboot nahi bana, mera khiyal hay k agar is afsanay main dukandaar k kirdaar per kuch zoo maani fiqray or hotay to ye is say bhi ziyada acha afsana hojata, aap ka afsaana perh kar boht khushi hoi our dili itminaan bhi k MASHALLAH yahan bohat achay achay likhnay walay mojood hain, khush rahain :rose

[Z.]

[*Hijab*]

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sadia aap nay itni achi kahani likhi hay k main jitni tareeef karon wo kam hay, achi manzar kashi ki hay or kahani main jo pegham aap nay diya hay wo bohat naseehat aamooz hay, aap boht achi likhnay wali hain is liye choti si, nanhi munni si tanqeed krnay ki jasaarat kar rahi hon :eye:
aap aik chonka daynay walay anjaam ki tarf kahani ko boht khoobsorti say lay kar to gae hain magar anjaam ka kahani say talluq kuch mazboot nahi bana, mera khiyal hay k agar is afsanay main dukandaar k kirdaar per kuch zoo maani fiqray or hotay to ye is say bhi ziyada acha afsana hojata, aap ka afsaana perh kar boht khushi hoi our dili itminaan bhi k MASHALLAH yahan bohat achay achay likhnay walay mojood hain, khush rahain :rose

thank you so very much dear for your appreciation and your useful comments:)
well, is kahani mein jahan tak yeh naqab chehron ki baat thi, usi ke saath saath, jis theme per mein focus ker rahi thi, woh main character ka view of people and life aur jis taran say us ne logon ko parkha tha aur parkh raha tha:)
mein koshish karoon gi key aur likh sakon aur woh behtar ho:)

[*Hijab*]

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shukriya:rose
thaparon say sudhar jayen tou phir kia he kehney:)

[*Hijab*]

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bahut achi tehreer hai Sadia

Khuda app ko aur sach likheny ki taaqat de

shukriya Pakiza ji:rose
INSHALLAH I will try to write more:)

[*Hijab*]

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buht chi tehreeer hai ......aaj kal tu aisa hi haal hai her jaga..

shukriya:)

[*Hijab*]

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meinay bhi aap ki yeh sharing first time parhi hai.... khooobsurat sharing hai..... keep it up

shukriya:)