POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

[suffard]

SACH PAR MABNI AIK AOR NAZAM...
AAP SAB KO SUNNA PARAIN GEE.:jazak:
KEE MUSIBAT A YAAR:tauba

[GumShuda]

Re: Mulla Ka Jawab..

wahhhh Bohat acha likha hai kahein kahein thoray lafaz kamzor paray lekin overall good work :)

[Shaim]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

Assalam o Alikum

MASHALLAH Very Nice Work! :thmbup:
Keep It Up :thmbup:

[tauruskhan]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

Assalam o Alikum

MASHALLAH Very Nice Work! :thmbup:
Keep It Up :thmbup:

:cc:

[Shaim]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

:cc:

lolzZzz kiya hoa? :kr:

[tauruskhan]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

lolzZzz kiya hoa? :kr:

kisi bi shayer sey in ashar ko check kera lejay
pata lag jaey ga key , is per well done milta hay ya naeen

not on topic just on structure :)

baki topic sey to pata hay hmm ko mullah bahi ka to kam hi kurna and aao baka kerna and fasad kerna hay
not a new topic by him

is ki jaga wo bachpani wali allama iqbal ki shikwa and jowbey shikwa hi share kerdeytay to in ki baat bi pori ho jati and maza bi ata

[Yaaram]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

achi hay - balkeh bohat achi - lekan shaeri kamzor hay

[Shaim]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

kisi bi shayer sey in ashar ko check kera lejay
pata lag jaey ga key , is per well done milta hay ya naeen

not on topic just on structure :)

mery khyal mai suffard bhai ny poetry ko abhi join kiya hai is lye initially poetry thori weak hooti hai pr i said "Very Nice" @ his effort as well as jo baatin unho ny kahiin us sy i agreed waqai aisa hi hota hai :)

baki topic sey to pata hay hmm ko mullah bahi ka to kam hi kurna and aao baka kerna and fasad kerna hay
not a new topic by him

:pagal:

is ki jaga wo bachpani wali allama iqbal ki shikwa and jowbey shikwa hi share kerdeytay to in ki baat bi pori ho jati and maza bi ata

jb papers hoye thy na mere to mainy SHIKWA n JAWAB E SHIKWA ki Tashreeh choor di thi choice pr :blush:

[Nokia_Afridi]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

Abb ma kya Kahu........

MULA hey na maray Kan ma Paydash ka wakat Azan deya

Mula na Mujay ISLAM seqaya

Mula hey mara Neqah Pareyga

Aor Mula hey mara Janaza bi.......Agree with MULAH ..and Sufard bhi

Good Work bro........

Laken ma

Fazal Rehman

Mulana Maudidi

Ya Lal Mazjad walay Abdul Aziz and Co...

En per 1 % barusa tak nehi aor na hey Mara Zamer en ku manta ha

............

Mulah tu

Mufti Muhm Taqi Usmani Sahib (Karachi)
MULAH tu Tariq Jameel Sahib (Fasilabad
MUlah Tu Mulana Jamshed Sahib (Raywaind)

En jasay Hotay Bohat saray ken ken ka nam lekuga

[suffard]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

kisi bi shayer sey in ashar ko check kera lejay
pata lag jaey ga key , is per well done milta hay ya naeen

not on topic just on structure :)

baki topic sey to pata hay hmm ko mullah bahi ka to kam hi kurna and aao baka kerna and fasad kerna hay
not a new topic by him

is ki jaga wo bachpani wali allama iqbal ki shikwa and jowbey shikwa hi share kerdeytay to in ki baat bi pori ho jati and maza bi ata

janab meri poetry main galtian hon gee main nay konsa kaha keh nahi hon gee.main nay is tarz ki poetry ''new new'' start ki hai.
waisay aap sahi keha kartay hain keh
''musalman ka kam sirf tanqeed karna hee reh giya hai'' as u r doing.
aray aray bhai kiya baat kar rahay ho???kahan iqbal ki shikwa ..jawab e shikwa aor kahan yeh ''jahilana '' nazam....bhai main too abhi ''start'' main hon.:donno::jazak:

[tauruskhan]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

janab meri poetry main galtian hon gee main nay konsa kaha keh nahi hon gee.main nay is tarz ki poetry ''new new'' start ki hai.

yaar mind naeen kerna , lakin baray bahi ki hesiat sey keh raha hoon
apni poetry ko ager improve kernwana hay to kisi poet sey is ka structure check kerwaya kero

structure normally not come first hand
tumam poets dosron sey is key silsaley main madad letay rahey haan

bahadur shah zafar, ghalib sey madad letay they etc etc

ager app ko poetry ka shok hay to , zaroor kisi sey contact karo

pir dehkna apni poetry sey khod isaq ho jaey ga tum ko

waisay aap sahi keha kartay hain keh
''musalman ka kam sirf tanqeed karna hee reh giya hai'' as u r doing.
aray aray bhai kiya baat kar rahay ho???kahan iqbal ki shikwa ..jawab e shikwa aor kahan yeh ''jahilana '' nazam....bhai main too abhi ''start'' main hon.:donno::jazak:

bahi app key jazbat sey jitna main wakif hon ga , shayed hi koi aur ho sakey
yeh sub meray per guzar chuki hay few years back

but i have learned key app ko ager kuch gain kerna ho to , thing for small change and work more
although main khod pori tara is per amal naeen ker pata but kohsih zaroor ker raha hoon

bohat zeyada borion key barey main sochnay sey wo khatam naeen hoteen
think for small change and do it

ager Allah ko maqsood ho ga , to thora thora bi bara change ho jaey ga

[suffard]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

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yaar mind naeen kerna , lakin baray bahi ki hesiat sey keh raha hoon
apni poetry ko ager improve kernwana hay to kisi poet sey is ka structure check kerwaya kero

structure normally not come first hand
tumam poets dosron sey is key silsaley main madad letay rahey haan

bahadur shah zafar, ghalib sey madad letay they etc etc

ager app ko poetry ka shok hay to , zaroor kisi sey contact karo

pir dehkna apni poetry sey khod isaq ho jaey ga tum ko



bahi app key jazbat sey jitna main wakif hon ga , shayed hi koi aur ho sakey
yeh sub meray per guzar chuki hay few years back

but i have learned key app ko ager kuch gain kerna ho to , thing for small change and work more
although main khod pori tara is per amal naeen ker pata but kohsih zaroor ker raha hoon

bohat zeyada borion key barey main sochnay sey wo khatam naeen hoteen
think for small change and do it

ager Allah ko maqsood ho ga , to thora thora bi bara change ho jaey ga

nahi nahi yaar main bhee kisi poet kay saath rabitah karna chahta hon lakin dar lagta hai keh kahin ''be..izzati'' na kar day....i mean ''chal oye'' na keh day.:cc:

[tauruskhan]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

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nahi nahi yaar main bhee kisi poet kay saath rabitah karna chahta hon lakin dar lagta hai keh kahin ''be..izzati'' na kar day....i mean ''chal oye'' na keh day.:cc:

rabta ker key to dehko
poet log kafi naram mazaj hotay haan , meri tarah naeen hotey
they always love to help new poets in correcting structure

[Shaim]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

Hmmm so.......:)

Now i must feel Proud to ve Bros like u :salam:
KHUSH RAHYYE HAMESHA :thmbup:
MA'ASSALAM! :lpop:

[naveed iqbal]

Re: POEM: Mulla Ka Jawab..

bahut achi koshish hay